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Sitting On The Porch
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Sitting On The Porch |
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PoetAtHeart13 Junior Member
since 2006-08-11
Posts 24Maryland |
Friday, August 11, 2006: I remember sitting on the front porch. The busy DC street, passing through our eyes. With skaters flying through, business men, and people on bicycles... Braiding your hair. We would laugh forever, and your hair would take three hours. Because you kept moving, and slapping your knees, every time something funny happened... But most of the time, we'd just be laughing at stupid stuff. I miss those times. And you'd run off to the bus early Monday mornings. Sticking you cocoa-brown face out the window. With your fresh Sunday night braids. I loved you more and more, as you waved... I remember that day like it was yesterday... My little girl, headed off to another day of second grade. So young and so much more to learn. I desired the days, that I'd get to see her grow... But then I'm in the kitchen with the mini white TV, doing the dishes. And the next thing I know, I'm rushing to my baby girls school, on lock down. Then at the hospital. Then at the funeral. And it all just comes back, as little pieces like that. So now I'm sitting on the porch, alone. Finally conquering up the strength to write this poem... ****Let me know what you think**** |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This stunned me. Intricate, and finely braided verse. Well done. TD |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Very well written you gave me chills and tears and the need to hug my daughter just because *hugs* to you ~*Sheli*~ By words the mind is winged |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
What do I think? I think my heart just broke a bit. I think you were so generous to share this lovely person. I think you are a wonderful painter of words. I think ... I just think that you shared a most beautiful part of your life. aziza |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
If this is true..I can feel your pain. I lived in MD and live close enough and visit often enough to Baltimore and watch the news enough to know the realness of this... good writing  M |
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dreamdc Member
since 2005-11-11
Posts 54Utah, USA |
Oh goodmess. You had to go and make me cry  lol. I have had some experiences lately to remind me how dear and near the children in my life are to me (and I don't even have any of my own, but its my sister's children who have hold of my hearts strings) All I can say to this is how beautiful, yet how sad all at once. Thank you for sharing. I need a tissue! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I can hardly describe how deeply this poem grasped my heart. In addition to its emotional impact, it is very well written, in fluid verses, with endearing phrases within the portrait of a beautiful child and a porch scene that oozes with love. All the best and the worst of life in this sincerely written and memorable piece. THank you for sharing Liz |
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PoetAtHeart13 Junior Member
since 2006-08-11
Posts 24Maryland |
Thanks so much 4 the love. Fortunately, I can say this hasn't happened to me or anyone I know. This poem just came to my heart...first picturing the Mother braiding the daughters hair...and the sadnes just came out... Thanks for the replies. Much luv, Rissa* *Just hold your children close* |
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