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In The Promise Of A World Forgotten
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In The Promise Of A World Forgotten |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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. I didn’t know you were listening, I didn’t know you could feel, I didn’t know you were bleeding, I didn’t know you were real. ©2006 by icebox . |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I like this very much, but it feels like the begining of something much longer....is there more to this?  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Amen, brother, amen. Four lines, four sticks of personal dynamite. I think that every person who reads this poem will take something different from it, and assume they know just what you had in mind...and they'll all be right. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox This touches something very human and makes it personal and gripping.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
icebox That's because you had her in the fridge. LOL |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
To me, this signifies a moment in growth...could be between a man and woman....could be between a parent and offspring when the child reaches maturity....could be when we open our eyes to the awareness of the world around us. In any case....a  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I didn't know is no excuse, is it...and it usually happens when it's too late. Reading this again I think how important it is to know, now. Poignantly unsettling. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
I fully agree with Ratleader. So, please add my echoing sentiments. Well done. Sandra |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
ahh....ignorance is bliss is it not? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
so now that you know, what changes? the thoughts, or the method of presentation? always, words trigger reactions, a jolt of sorts, often to the core words have great power  a powerful write, m'friend |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sometimes simple is louder and more powerful This is both |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I love the economy of words  Well done! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Excellent quatrain. It tells the whole story, doesn't it? Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You have always, to me, been a man of few but many powerful words. You can turn most any thought into a neon sign, flashing brightly, imprinting on our minds. |
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