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Grinch
Member Elite

since 2005-12-31

Posts 2929
Whoville

0 posted 2006-08-04 07:57 PM

Thank you for the heartache
And the whimpering at night.
Thank you for the promise that
“Everything would be alright”
Did I thank you for the splinters
As my world crashed round my head?
Or for making me believe
In every twisted thing you said?
Should I cover you in glory,
Hang your portrait on my wall?
For taking me to heights
From which you knew that I’d soon fall.

Thank you for the crushing,
When the crush became too much,
The left behind, and out my mind
emotions - I'm so touched.
Never mind the tears and torture
From a wound that never mends
I think all that was covered when you said,
“We can still be friends”
I think I’m all done thanking now,
As I lie alone here in my bed
But I’d thank you one more time
If I could get you out my head.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2006-08-04 08:48 PM

Grinch,
Ouch! Sarcasm at a new level. Proof some pity parties are bigger than others. I must say as to form, you write very well, In my humble opinion. As to experience, I have felt the pain. Thanks for the reminder. I truly hope all is well soon. Time is your friend. Peace.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Grinch
Member Elite

since 2005-12-31

Posts 2929
Whoville

2 posted 2006-08-04 09:12 PM

Larry,

I’m not going to say “thanks” mainly because I know the word it replaced in the above effort but I do appreciate you taking the time to read it and the kind words regarding my attempt.

BTW

Don’t tell my wife I wrote this, I’d hate for her to get any ideas – after 20 something years I’ve grown accustomed to her.

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

3 posted 2006-08-04 09:43 PM

I love this write. It's first class satire in flowing lines.

Rae

Kimberly ann
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 61

4 posted 2006-08-04 10:17 PM

i know how u feel...i just lost one of my friendships with a guy.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2006-08-05 08:12 PM

Ah, an enjoyable love-pain write, dripping with just the right touch of bitterness.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2006-08-05 08:22 PM

Well done,  you should team up with Passing
Shadows,  she writes this style very very
well.

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

7 posted 2006-08-05 11:53 PM

Your words hooked me.
This is my second read of your poem.
It's cynical and wonderful in the bite.
Good writing.

aziza

seraphin
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1004
Michigan

8 posted 2006-08-05 11:55 PM

My friend aziza said it best. I echo her words.

TomMark
Member Elite

since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
LA,CA

9 posted 2008-01-06 06:52 PM

Ha ha ah aha ha aha ha aha ha.

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