A Chimera of Consciousness

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Open Poetry #38

A Chimera of Consciousness

Triskaidekaphobia
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since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

0 posted 2006-08-03 11:48 AM

A Chimera of Consciousness

You can weep on my shoulder,
but don't think I care at all
when you cry over lost love.

You only feed my jealousy
for those tears are a heresy
that I cannot match.

I have at lost all ability
and sum of my empathy,
I'm empty as such.

I stubbed out my old dismay,
a cigarette in an ashtray
and I can't find a light.

I no longer feel on my own
so I'll take your loan;
your pain's a drug.

I am a chimera of consciousness
and the surrogate of sensation,
living through vicarious vitriol.

Inexorably empty...

"We all know Major Tom's a junkie"

Ashes to Ashes - David Bowie

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2006-08-03 11:54 AM

I think this is universal in at least one time in most people's lives

me...yes I know how this is
Love the way you wrote it!

the quell
Member

since 2006-07-19

Posts 144
Liverpool, UK

2 posted 2006-08-03 11:55 AM

I LOVED this piece. Hurrah for good old-fashioned vitriol!! Seriously though the language was marvellous; I particularly liked the metaphor of stubbing out a cigarette on an ashtray (yeah, I'm trying to give up...it's not really happening)
Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed it. Oh, and the Bowie reference in your sig...I salute thee!

They aren't flaps; they're my face!
- The Mighty Boosh

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

3 posted 2006-08-04 10:20 PM

You weave words well.
I like how you write and there are times that I want to stamp out dismay too.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2006-08-04 10:46 PM

LT...

A bit of salt,
a little wound
the sting is...

be well, and write more
soon.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2006-08-05 12:06 PM

I too love the cigarette
metaphor and chimera is
an exceptional choice...

this grabbed me
and kept me

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