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aziza
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since 2006-07-09
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

0 posted 2006-08-03 12:24 PM


Dance With Me

I am cold
and yet I drink soda with ice
How stupid is that
I wonder
If I close my eyes
I can slip into my mind
as a core of warmth
grows and surrounds my heart
and my limbs tingle
I could hypnotized myself
I think
But could I wake myself up again
and could I make myself nicer
kinder, gentler
A new improved model
of what I was
Self pity is not becoming
nor is this chip I carry
on my shoulder today
Get over it.
Move on.
Dance with me
embrace the woman in pain
and dance with her
her who is me
dance with me, oh please
for we are one and the same.

aziza

© Copyright 2006 Alison - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
1 posted 2006-08-03 02:45 AM


I eat ice when I'm freezing too
poettothecars
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since 2006-02-10
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New Zealand
2 posted 2006-08-03 03:07 AM


The imagery of this poem is fantastic, that is about all I can say

a poet who cares

playing.with.crayons
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since 2006-01-02
Posts 362
Neverland
3 posted 2006-08-03 07:06 AM


Dance with me
embrace the woman in pain
and dance with her

i loved this write. xx

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
4 posted 2006-08-03 07:50 AM


like drinking hot coffee
when it is 105 out
guess nutsy is ok

slow or fast? the dance
enjoyed it ms

aziza
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since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
5 posted 2006-08-03 11:09 AM


Thank you all

...

and always, always slow

SusieQ
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since 2006-08-01
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Michigan, USA
6 posted 2006-08-04 01:48 AM


I wish I could dance like that. Beautiful.
HopeS
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since 2000-12-22
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Perth Western Australia
7 posted 2006-08-04 07:08 AM


What more can I say , only I hope you do a happy dance each day

Hope

Rick
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since 2001-06-21
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Victoria, Australia
8 posted 2006-08-04 09:43 AM


I would be delighted my friend to take the chance and have the dance, I am not a good dancer though, you might then write a poem about sore feet. Good write dear friend.

Sincerely
Rick

Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
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Far from where I am going
9 posted 2006-08-05 11:29 AM


just meet me on the dance floor, chip and all.

great write, fantastic imagery.

-John

nice use of muffin



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