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The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

0 posted 2006-07-27 11:42 PM

tempter
shape shifter
he twirls her round
the dance floor
feverish blossom
in white dress

close now
his eyes grab bayou water
send its reflection to her
as she’s never seen it before
sorghum thick

driving beat
his thighs pump la-la
her shoulders swing white
to the fiddle and frottoir

lights string the dance floor
encircling a study of heat
something takes leave of her

he slips juju
in her palm
ah bebe
he whispers

leaves her lying in the bramble bush
heart pounding to the beat
of the faded jingle
white dress faded

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2006-07-27 11:57 PM

talk about some night moves
~sorghum thick~
grinning here

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2006-07-28 12:02 PM

Thank you Kacy.
The charcoal man is
so scandalous.
He's taken on a life
of his own.

Smile.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2006-07-28 01:30 AM

Nice writing...James

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2006-07-28 01:32 AM

Thank you, James.

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

5 posted 2006-07-28 02:03 AM

You brought me a different world. Does that make sense? You took me elsewhere and I saw a culture I am not usually part of and ... I saw ...

driving beat
his thighs pump la-la

and I fell in love with your poem.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2006-07-28 02:11 AM

Thank you aziza.
I'm glad you saw and
heard it. I love
Zydeco music and
I love the
charcoal man.

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

7 posted 2006-07-28 06:19 AM

A wonderful read dear Lady, aziza relied as I felt, in a different world, seductive, primative in nature seeking the pleasure of the moment. Great write and scene painting.

Sincerely
Rick

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

8 posted 2006-07-28 07:28 AM

lady one...zyd' is the verve..the bad pulse rowdy dow...can see the cypress hair'd boys grinnin here. makes me hongry for mudbugs and sweecorn, red spuds on a cocola tray...and some dare ya eye'd gypsy foot in cotton skimpy

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

9 posted 2006-07-28 08:07 AM

whoa...ehhh hem....

incredible writing Lady

enjoyed

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2006-07-28 08:56 AM

More?

Please?

WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

11 posted 2006-07-29 02:02 AM

WOW, this is one of your Best!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

12 posted 2006-07-29 02:51 AM

Thank you so much Rick.
I’m glad you enjoyed it.

Oh Stranger, you are a scandal.
You like mudbugs?

Oops! Hee hee… LeeJ.
Caught me. Thank you.

Can’t seem to get him out
of my mind, Karilea.
Thank you.

WindWalker, thank you so much.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

13 posted 2006-07-29 02:21 PM

Very sensual and just as good as ever!

- Owl

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

14 posted 2006-07-29 11:39 PM

Thank you dear friend.
Hugs.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

15 posted 2011-03-27 12:20 PM

"driving beat
his thighs pump la-la"

still caught me, held me and made me watch listen and learn. Loving this.

A

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