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you're always in the middle of my night
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you're always in the middle of my night |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
a phone rang sharply, three inches to my right, to interrupt a sweet-night-dream at 3am and order me out of bed and into your reach. with a mind too fogged-over to clearly understand the words that were spoken in hoarse, slurred speech i shook my head and wiped my eyes as i stumbled through the dark and found the switch on the wall turning it on just to flinch away when the light glared harsh and white, and flip it off again. tip toe down the stairs, doll, don't wake up the world. close the door softly, and don't slip on the ice. you'll crack open that pretty head you have. i shoved my hands in my pockets and stared at the ground as my feet quickly walked away from me huddling my shoulders, and looking for the car i knew would be stationed to whisk me away to a place where you always erased all the confusion i had felt by day. it's so so black out, and my lips are icing blue my eyes are ignoring my heart and trying to close with all their strength. you're the only one who ever could keep me up. let's just drive away, and ignore the windows that might be bright when we return. all these places--they're so run-of-the-mill and it's second-nature to forget to really look at them. but when they're all closed and empty they hold a magic, that they only share with me and you. that blinking alarm clock of mine doesn't matter, and neither does that date-book you hold so close. the sun is gonna rise and force us to forget, but until then we own this town and you're only mine, and i'm your best known secret. it got so cold so fast it never phased you though, did it? you never could feel a single-thing bad. tires are swerving and leaving tracks in the snow i told you that steering wheel isn't just for decoration. we have to go home, and i have to wake up hair needs to be washed and i promise those scratches on your skin will fade. same time, same place? you can count on me- i'm counting on you. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I leaned into this poem as I read it. You engrossed me and I got lost in your words. aziza |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Wow, I'm not sure what I think right now. This was awesome. I, too, got lost in the words of your poem.. this was great.. ~heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
thank you both :-) --a |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh, what a hot rendezvous the kind that melts snow and ice |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
hahaha oh midnitesun, it was one of those rendezvous indeed. haha i'm glad you understand. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
elisalie, I grinned at that line about the flipped light switch it sure makes me flinch at 3 AM! |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
hahaha oh i know, lights like that could wake the dead. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Nice one, elisalie. This is the part that stopped me cold: "the sun is gonna rise and force us to forget, but until then we own this town and you're only mine, and i'm your best known secret" Yes. |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
:-) that was one of the lines i wrote that was the most honest and explained what i felt best. i'm glad it struck you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
if anybody wakes me up at 3am, it better be good LOL I loved this! |
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