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Little Kingdom |
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Jack Straw Member
since 2006-03-02
Posts 70 |
Wandering the numerous hills of mine Looking for ocean or for sea. When under my feet I find A world of soft tranquility. Leaning down in admiration Of nature’s fine laws in place On this hill, a smaller hill Co-exists and does not waste their days Time matters not to these inhabitants As long as they work the day through They worry not of higher beings Yes, religion is absent too. Little utopians living merrily Each of them knowing their own place Serving their queen in undying loyalty I wish men would do the same Gazing at the black soldiers marching Around the sands of their home Protecting their queen from incoming visitors Such as me, eyes wide and grown Little do they know I am, But a passerby, reveling In the lifestyle shown I chuckle and as I'm walking I drop an apple core for their home. --- which title do you like better? [This message has been edited by Jack Straw (05-22-2006 08:07 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
for your thoughts, I like Little Kingdom better....this made me smile  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The little kingdom is fascinating no doubt ... but watch what happens if there are uncautious intruders... it's an apparent tranquility. Appreciated your write. Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Enjoyed your observation of a termite hill! Whilst I like the idea of the workers being called little communists, it conflicts with the idea of a monarchy - and it is, in actual fact, a monarchy because they are serving their queen. Therefore I prefer Little Kingdom as the title. - Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, and presuming that the apple core is of use to them (I don't know enough about termites - or anything for that matter), thank you for giving them the apple core. On second thoughts, even if they can't and don't use it, thank you for the warmth and good will to them. I believe they will have felt it. - Owl |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Jack, Thanks for your write. I was just wondering, do termites write poems about people? lol Good Write. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I like the Little Kingdon best, too. They are amazing creatures, for sure! Enjoyed the observation. |
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Jack Straw Member
since 2006-03-02
Posts 70 |
do you think I should change little communists to little utopians? P.S. I was going for an anthill not termite =) |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I thought it may have been ants and nearly said so, but didn't. I like "little utopians" especially as they are "merry". - Owl |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 why am I now seeing an army of ants marching merrily across this blue screen as if they own the thing even though they cannot see what is above them, all beneath them is fair game to plunder and ravage and... sorry, I got carried away just now |
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Jack Straw Member
since 2006-03-02
Posts 70 |
I'll go with Little Kingdom then. thank you for everyone's comments, I appreciate them. |
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