“Bird of Paradise, Made in China”

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Edward Grim
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Greenville, South Carolina

0 posted 2006-07-20 12:40 PM

Bird of Paradise, Made in China

The humidity cooked
the air-born rice strewed across the sky.
Chinese snowflakes of softened starch
fell upon the wedding guests.

Like the biblical stories
of the miraculous happening,
the bride and the groom drifted
haplessly out of the church
with full-metal fingers
on their way to honeymoon.

Just give it a week,
his Lincoln black top hat
would turn into another woman’s underpants
and his smiling face with champagne flute
in hand would transform into a
dixie cup chalice housing the Russian god,
Vodka, and a lady in his lap screaming,
calling him Roberto Estavez.

Till death do his legs part
for other ladies.

The bride planted a
Bird of Paradise on their front lawn.
She thought the vows and loving would last
longer than it did.
She presumed that she acquired
the lifestyle christened the American dream.
But like everything else in America,
her marriage was made in China.

I'm not smart, I'm just a tricky dumb person.

INclan
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1 posted 2006-07-20 02:43 PM

Interesting…pessimistic prose.

INclan

aziza
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2 posted 2006-07-20 03:01 PM

Damn, I wish I had written this. It's really, really good.

aziza

Edward Grim
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3 posted 2006-07-20 05:50 PM

Pessimism is just fact-based knowledge without a sugar coating to make it sticky.

thanks aziza

I'm not smart, I'm just a tricky dumb person.

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2006-07-20 06:37 PM

Enjoyed...James

Heather Miller
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5 posted 2006-07-22 12:32 PM

sounds like my ex husband......

Without the experiance of love where would we be? We would have no memories to cherish.
With love it brings hurt with hurt bittersweet memories.

passing shadows
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6 posted 2006-07-22 07:08 PM

very cool write

aziza
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7 posted 2006-07-22 07:10 PM

I wonder how many times I have come back to read this. I am suffering from serious expression envy!

Edward Grim
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8 posted 2006-07-23 10:59 PM

Thanks everybody, especially you aziza. I'm flattered immensely.

I'm not smart, I'm just a tricky dumb person.

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9 posted 2006-07-27 04:30 PM

Yes....one should never make assumptions....if you do, you're more likely to get the bird, than the paradise!

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aziza
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10 posted 2006-07-28 01:51 AM

Told you that I come in and read this time and again.

You are welcome - I only spoke the truth.

aziza

suthern

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11 posted 2006-08-02 10:46 AM

She thought the vows and loving would last
longer than it did.

How often that's the case. *sad smile*

This is excellent!

aziza
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12 posted 2006-08-04 02:01 AM

I love this poem -- so I need it up here. It's one of my favorites and yes .. I know I can add it to my library and will ... when I am done ... putting it up here.

seraphin
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13 posted 2006-08-04 01:12 PM

Well, I'm definately with aziza on this one. This is one totally awesome write. It has everything. Then I read your comment and thought, whoa, he got THAT dead on, too.

seraphin
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14 posted 2006-08-04 01:14 PM

I mean this is really, really good.

XOx Uriah xOX
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15 posted 2006-08-04 03:29 PM

Awesome !!!
I have been reading you ever since I came here.
You disappeared for awhile...and came back...Smokin'!!!!
I always enjoy your works.  Thank you.

Oh!  This also reminds me of a saying...
"The Bird of Paradise only lands in the hand that does not grasp."
:: bows ::

Edward Grim
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since 2005-12-18

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Greenville, South Carolina

16 posted 2006-08-04 04:41 PM

Wow, I'm surprised of the response this is getting. Thanks again Aziza, I'm glad you like it so much. Thanks Seraphin for the read. Uriah, unfortunately I am plagued with the once a month writer's block, lol. Thanks everybody. Cheers - Ed

I'm not smart, I'm just a tricky dumb person.

seraphin
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Michigan

17 posted 2006-08-05 11:09 PM

Just a "pop up" to give others a chance to experience this. I've read it once again, and I still love it.

davidmerriman
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18 posted 2006-08-06 12:53 PM

i liked it.
the Russian god, vodka, made me laugh. But technically the expression is for women to part their legs. i'm not sure if the expression works for men.

Edward Grim
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Greenville, South Carolina

19 posted 2006-08-06 11:25 AM

Yeah I know that about the expression. I thought I'd switch thing up a bit. Thanks

Thanks again seraphin

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