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Open Poetry #38

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divine chaos
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since 2006-07-09

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dancing 'neath the moon

0 posted 2006-07-13 07:08 PM

Lays she, clothed in midnight sheen,
In beauty only night can bring,
Captivated by her dream

In muted moonlight so pristine,
Where dancing fairies softly sing,
Lays she, clothed in midnight sheen

Enraptured, he surveys the scene,
While lunar lovers sway and swing,
Captivated by her dream.

A lovelier sight, he ne'er has seen.
Naught a care what day may bring,
Lays she, clothed in midnight sheen

"Courage!"cries his silent scream
"To be, with this celestial being,
Captivated by her dream."

'Neath sky, a'light in moondust gleam,
A temptress, to him, beckoning,
Lays she, clothed in midnight sheen
Captivated by her dream.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-07-13 07:08 PM

Look at you glow!

The Shadow in Blue
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since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

2 posted 2006-07-13 07:13 PM

Très Sensass Divine Chaos! (translation:very good/beautiful) I liked the repeated 4th line in the majority of the stanzas and the rhyme sceme. Greatly Enjoyed.

^_^
J.

divine chaos
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 617
dancing 'neath the moon

3 posted 2006-07-13 07:16 PM

I was brushing up on my poetry formats in the workshop forum, I've written freestyle for so long, I wanted to see if I could still do something structured

Thankies for the kind comments!
*beams*

~*Sheli*~

By words the mind is winged
~Aristophanes~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2006-07-13 07:49 PM

divine chaos
A delightful read, enjoyed.

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