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blue man dancing
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blue man dancing |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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blue man dancing dance I dance all showered in the light while the blue grease glisten melts into me until it feels more real than skin it is me yes all you see I am blue man I hate it shine so brilliant I glow on the stage blue blue oh holy blue and I can’t not run to the music the driven drums of it yell yell in the dance crazy silence silence I don’t dance the beat anymore can’t hear the black whams at all but in the tiny white silences between the beat oh then I dance whirl off-center whirl in the thousand rhythmic silences between the pounding roll yes yes jerk dance in every instant lack of sound echo light can’t see you out there in the dark all dark but the white kliegs and my blue flash but then echoes of my light glance off you here there and I see you stare awed yes you blue you love the blue while I dance crazy awe you in the white torn silence cut between the rhythm blue oh I am blue whirl the sparkling echoes you think I jerk dance this music all of you I dance silence I hate it For the uninitated..... http://www.venetian.com/BlueManGroup/index.cfm |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, this whirled a dervish... welcome home, Sir! |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
silence I don’t dance the beat anymore can’t hear the black whams at all but in the tiny white silences between the beat oh then I dance ******************** I love these lines  By words the mind is winged |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 thanks for the initiation |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...thanks for the link...interesting...although I couldn't open some of it...probably my computer. I do love the swirl of this poem...to dance the silence is not easy. There is so much movement in this poem that I can see it.  |
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deasomnians Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 87California |
Frantic, sad, and beautiful. -Katie |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Ed, These guys are truly inspirational. I caught their act in 2002 @ the Luxor and was moved to post in Open #22 under the heading of " Live from the Luxor " Your staccato interpretation contained both the frenetic pace, and the insight to what I witnessed. Both are outstanding. Doc |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I have read works where the writer managed to make me feel the sway of a waltz... but your words bring us right into a dance far more complicated than ONE two three so we feel the beat but also breathe the frenzy... and feel the person beyond the show. This is absolutely superb!! You impressed me so much I bought a ticket to see them during my vacation... though having this glimpse of tears and torment behind the mask may have me squirming a bit with guilt as I watch. *S* |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
with these words you've captured them, step-by-step as your eyes and ears met their souls, and then you generously shared the experience with those who could not see or feel the dance thank you! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was awesome, contagious |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I'm glad this came back. It is probably my last post at PiP, and it seemed a shame to see it fall unnoticed. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
So many images hit me as I read this - but I loved this line whirl off-center whirl in the thousand rhythmic silences aziza |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
One of your best. The construction reminds me of another favorite poet of mine too, and I have often told him that he SCULPTS words. Check out the work of brian sites on a search here, after reading this, I think you would enjoy his technique of including a visual construction to the written word. Much enjoyed this one, it's obviously a style I am envious of, and yet another form that is apparently beyond my capability. Good Stuff Ed. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I sincerely hope it's not your last... for the perfection of it shows just how much we'd be missing... what famine would come upon our poetic feast. |
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