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elisalie16
Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 118
new jersey

0 posted 2006-07-12 02:17 AM

the grass was long and pressed down deep with night
and the excuses we spilled during our attempts to swallow,
as we laughed about hours when the sun had been so bright
we'd had to squint our eyes and turn our heads.
my hands grew numb and i slipped off a bench,
landing head-first on the ground.
there we lay and looked up from an all-time low
to see the stars that got us high.
sunrise is scheduled for soon, i know,
i'm so sorry i only speak in the dark.
a few short hours means a different world
which may or may not be reality,
but beats us up none the less, without a thought.
at least the nights that we whitness so black
leave shades of blue on wrist and neck to
remind our heads why they're still spinning.
the same places at polar times
host settings and sequences that
are too close to accept but will slip away all too soon.
a line of gray rang harsh in warning,
telling us to make sure we were safely in bed with the doors shut and bolted
before we closed our eyes and were forced to wake up.

[This message has been edited by elisalie16 (07-12-2006 06:04 AM).]

DejaEntendu
Member

since 2005-12-06

Posts 82
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2006-07-12 07:57 AM

I like this a lot. I think the title says it all- a 4 AM memory. Makes me think of my own. Thanks for the read.

divine chaos
Senior Member

since 2006-07-09

Posts 617
dancing 'neath the moon

2 posted 2006-07-12 08:01 AM

Welcome to PiP! I look forward to seeing more of your work

~*Sheli*~

By words the mind is winged
~Aristophanes~

elisalie16
Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 118
new jersey

3 posted 2006-07-12 11:06 AM

ahh thank you both!
i posted two other poems under Dark Poetry, as i was unsure where exactly they belonged

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2006-07-12 03:46 PM

Elisalie~
Welcome to PiP ... you have the makings of a fine poet~

Enjoy yourself here ... it is real easy to do~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

sweetberry
Member

since 2006-03-29

Posts 125

5 posted 2006-07-12 06:53 PM

WELCOME...NICE START!!!!

elisalie16
Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 118
new jersey

6 posted 2006-07-12 10:01 PM

thank you all for making me feel so welcome here, i enjoy it already.

if any of you have any suggestions for improvement/helpful hints, i would appreciate anything you have to say.

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