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Kaddish
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Kaddish |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I would write a big thick book or I could divide the dimes and watch that minute hand of time ticking like a black cat tail to write in my not perfect script telling tales no one should know chaptered much more neatly than the things that I recall and those are memories that whisper dread and startled voices of the dead laughing in the punches of the lines of jokes and silence says that we should show some respect or politely bow our head I could say (if you'd shaddup) that there was never quite enough of silence in my mind to share-- chromatics- and the drum was snared inbetween the chords I cared 'til everything you did was forced. I sat in ache of melody Stevie Wonder and the sweet sound of War in quivering like a fiddle-whine of we stretching the tenacity of a reed just like a string strident and diminishing a mourning of eternity: The Jews sang me Kaddish and we shoveled dirt and wept. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You always gift me with some kind of resonant thump right here.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Oh waht a joy it is to see you in there writing again...I've so missed you...now to this brutally honest write (and that's why I adore reading you) I think you (should write a book) and the tails are most definately what people should know...why you ask? Well, and this is just my perspective...we humans tend to place ourselves in our protective little worlds, fearing truth, and the, shall we say, more distasteful things in life...and I'm wondering if that is where we've gone wrong..??? Perhaps if we'd face those truths, accept and acknowledge them as well as the good, as part of our lives...perhaps we'd make changes? the lines of jikes and silence says that we should show some respect or politely bow our heads.... AMEN Girlfriend...!!! I could say (if you'd shaddup) that there was never quite enough of silence in my mind to share-- chromatics- and the drum was snared inbetween the chords I cared 'til everything you did was forced. I enjoy your dry sense of humor along with the brutal honesty you display in your poems...you find humor in even the darkest nights...Girl, thats a hard character trait to come by these days... I sat in ache of melody Stevie Wonder and the sweet sound of War in quivering like a fiddle-whine of we stretching the tenacity of a reed just like a string strident and diminishing a mourning of eternity: The Jews sang me Kaddish and we shoveled dirt and wept. Well, then, I nearly copied the whole poem, didn't I? I loved it Karen...wish you'd write that book...I do... Kudos and  |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
you just gave me chills, I so loved this read! Thanks ever so for sharing! ~*Sheli*~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"I could say (if you'd shaddup) that there was never quite enough of silence in my mind to share-- chromatics- and the drum was snared inbetween the chords I cared 'til everything you did was forced" incredible you are just so talented !!! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
The title called to me and then there was this: "The Jews sang me Kaddish and we shoveled dirt and wept." Magnificent! |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"I could say (if you'd shaddup) that there was never quite enough of silence in my mind to share-- chromatics-" Well, Ser, you use plenty of chromatics here, and some kaddish, too. .....jo |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, every time I read you, I am overwhelmed by your sky-high intelligence. As a separate thought, you make every single letter of every syllable of every word count 10. Your observance and analysis of everything you see is sharp enough to cut steel and you weave power-packed honesty into incomparable beauty - albeit sometimes showing the ugliness of beauty (or perhaps the beauty of ugliness?). I seldom manage to find a line of yours I like better than the rest, as it is all so good, but this time, my favourite line is: "ticking like a black cat tail" I am very tempted to say that this is my favourite of your poems, but I am not going to, as I would probably be wrong, because there are so many that I find mind-blowing. - Owl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh Owl--if you only knew.... I'm not so smart, sweetie. But I do so appreciate you, and your constant encouragement. Kaddish... this time it was sung for me yanno. I can't seem to go forward and I can't go back, so I am stuck in the middle, haunting myself. Thank you all for reading, and just for being fine company. Love to all.  |
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