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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia 
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Hey Everyone, I guess this is my first post here at passions. I'm fairly young and poetry is my way of dealing with all my emotions, the good and the bad.. Hope You Enjoy!! If they all knew me, they wouldn't be so cruel. If somebody believed me, the tears wouldn't fall. I wouldn’t be the girl I am, I wouldn’t hide away in fear. I wouldn't clutch to emptiness, I'd have someone to hold me near. There’s something deep inside me, It makes me want to pray. That every single inch of me, Will soon be washed away. Never to return again, Then maybe they’ll see, The warm loving spirit, That they let bleed from me. The tears will keep on falling, The smile is upside down, I begin to wonder who I am, Why my life is dark and drowned. Can somebody save me, From what ill never be. Can anybody help me, To be just plain old me? I reckon if they'd listened, I wouldn't be laying on the ground. Waiting to be rescued, Listening, hearing the siren sound. The dark deep memories, are sailing into space. My thoughts and beliefs are fading, Into an empty place. My breath slowly leaking, my emotions getting lost. My heart is slowly breaking, at all dying costs. [This message has been edited by RevengeIsMine (07-08-2006 06:57 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hi Jess...welcome to Passions very emotional first post here I know where you're coming from...been there, and go there again time after time |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hi Jess, emotional release and cleansing here, I well know the feeling and write this way often; to put it down and share it truly does help, put it to paper my friend and don't live it all out, your imagination will take over and though you will sound down, you will feel high on life, enjoying what you can do. Very well done for your first post my friend, keep them coming and smile with life. Sincerely Rick |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 hello Jess!Rick speaks the truth, with wise words and a gentle heart. Release the frustration through art, and you will find doors of life opening you never imagined were in front of you. Enjoyed your first post of poetry. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Welcome to PIP. Hope you enjoy the new found friends you will find. As Rick said...writing is a good release for pent up feelings. Good and Bad. One of my motto's is.. " Write on..Aim for the stars...And eat CHOCOLATE." Hugs BonBon |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Jess Welcome to pip. Your poem was very emotional. For a minute it scared me as I have been in the same feeling situations. You have friends here at pip. Your first post deserves a Bravo. very well done and keep on trying. This is a nice place to be. Hugs Kimberly |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Thanks everyone for your kind comments. I am enjoying everyones lovley poems. You all do a fantastic job. |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
I've found over the years that writing, whether poetry, prose, or just keeping a personal journal, are very cleansing and therapeutic. I see a lot of my younger self in your poem and relate so much to the feelings that created it. Keep writing, the pen is the therapist, the blank white page is his couch, and the heartfelt words that flow and fill are the healing process. Your talent will bring them all together  Sheli The artist is nothing without the gift, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jess~ Welcome to PiP~ Warm waves across the pond~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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ApeironCalamity Junior Member
since 2006-07-03
Posts 10California |
Welcome! I recently posted my own first poem on the board and everyone here is wonderful. You're poem is wonderful, and it's brave of you to share such deep emotion with us. For that I thank you! Keep it up. ------------------------ |
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