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Magnus
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0 posted 2006-07-04 09:28 PM


Whispered
Whispered, the touch of a feather tickling
the mind....basking in the cooling of
passion as the squeak of an old porch
board reminded of yet another...
another time when frosted air rode
the desert nights and stars fell
lazily from silken skies.

Whispered, the sound of bees touching
blooms that hung lazily in reverent bow
as the sun’s rays warmed the slender
sprig of a stem weaving and swaying.

Whispered, a trace of breeze chasing
a rabbit’s tail as a tumbleweed raced
it’s last mile before the fence line
finished the race and another sway
of the swing brought an echo one
step closer to a sleeping ear

waiting to snare a whisper
before the break of day roared
like a hungered lion.

© Copyright 2006 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-07-04 10:31 PM


You're amazing !
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

passing shadows
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2 posted 2006-07-04 11:45 PM


this is so vivid and beautiful!
I love this!

ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2006-07-05 07:39 AM


So softly said.
TD

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4 posted 2006-07-05 08:03 AM


words
that whisper
louder
than shouting
your poem
a willow
in a summer breeze

OwlSA
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5 posted 2006-07-05 03:23 PM


Loved this!  So glad that the snare was only to catch a whisper!

- Owl

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6 posted 2006-07-05 03:33 PM


They say if you want to get someone's attention, whisper.
Hugs YOU!!

Don't bring me down now,
let me stay here for awhile
You know life's too short,
let me bathe here in your smile.

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2006-07-05 07:48 PM


Magnus~
There are so many remarkably creative thoughts in this piece ... I love the all of it~

~Whispered *Huglets*~
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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8 posted 2006-07-05 08:55 PM


Very well put together I'm glad I took time to read this one!
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9 posted 2006-07-05 10:19 PM


Barry, the "cooling of passion" and old porch swings.... ohhhh!  Some enchanted memories of summer nights woven into the softness of the desert. I was not yet a teen when I lived in the desert (so long ago), but I remember tumbleweeds, sagebrush, earthen colors, and afternoons quiet in the heat which cooled into evenings with dragonflies --  and stars so close I dreamed I could touch them.   Your poetry adds the magic of romance...I only heard the adults shushing me and telling me to go to sleep when it was still daylight.     I simply adored this one!  Thank you!
~Klassy

iliana
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10 posted 2006-07-05 11:12 PM


The images in this take me home.  Much enjoyed, BJ.........jo
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11 posted 2006-07-06 12:22 PM


"Whispered, the sound of bees touching
blooms that hung lazily in reverent bow
as the sun’s rays warmed the slender
sprig of a stem weaving and swaying."

Sounds like Texas in the summer!
Great write Magnus.

JL


Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

ctowen
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12 posted 2006-07-06 07:36 AM


left me lazily glancing over and over ...

     still whispering with your pen I see.


  Another fine write!

Ct

Martie
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13 posted 2006-07-06 09:09 AM


Barry....you are so very!!  I love listening to this!  
Sunshine
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14 posted 2006-07-06 09:15 AM



Passion cools?
Nah...

not when there are poets
that write like this.




LeeJ
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15 posted 2006-07-06 11:29 AM


and the passion heats up again...
Barry, the passion you own keeps growing in us...thank you for this

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