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McDonald's Drive-Through
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McDonald's Drive-Through |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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McDonald's Drive Through I stared with hollow eyes through the rear view mirror at the couple in the car behind. Time stood still the torture as anger devoured my envy for this gloating couple, bleached blonde beauty at his side. Emptiness growled my stomach sorrow as I ordered four Big Macs a milkshake and a large order of fries though everyone knows how much I hate fries; But surely their warmth will coax my cold and the salt will bring me closer to heart failure since I'm almost there anyway. He kissed her, caressed her cheek and smiled and I've never felt so alone as I fought to hold back the tears ashamed of how hardy I laughed at the thought of putting my car into reverse to smash their moment to pieces. I bet he paints the sky with stars for her and shines the moon mauve at her command. I bet that she's a size two and can eat anything she wants. Maybe I should change my order to a salad? Too late. I need the comfort, the pseudo-quasi happy denial this survive one more day existence. So tonight as skin sheds itself I'll make love to the taste then force the food down the toilet and watch my insides swirl in shades of pain. Ronald McDonald grins too damn much. Maybe he'll let me borrow his mask? Melissa Long-Monette Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have my memories of McDonalds those last two lines are exactly what I've thought before |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
A tragedy with comic overtones and psychological dissection worthy of big screen interpretation, and all in thirty-three lines. |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Ouch.. really felt this, Melissa. Very well written The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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FNG Member
since 2006-02-07
Posts 477 |
just curious honeybee... So tonight as skin sheds itself I'll make love to the taste then force the food down the toilet and watch my insides swirl in shades of pain. Wat does this imply?  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Too late. I need the comfort, the pseudo-quasi happy denial this survive one more day existence A heart breaking story, I've known all to well...  even though I high lighted 3 lines as my favorite, the entire poem from beginning to end was like reading the Da Vinci Code; guess cause I've been there and you took me back to a very sad time... Very much enjoyed... Hugs |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
Oh wow. there's so much emotion in this poem, I got paper cuts turning these blue pages with you. A truly wonderful write. farewell the ash-tray girl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Malissa...Raw emotion...put my happy memories of McD away for a bit. Wishing you happier times!  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
AWWW man this hurts...and yeah you just want to smack them all! It's hard to watch someone elses happiness when you are in pain. Like this a lot!!! |
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scyzoryk_o4 Junior Member
since 2006-05-23
Posts 36Canada and Poland |
The sting of jealousy can be overwhelming. However when it starts to creep into my mind I try to remember that every one has their own personal problems and I have northing to be jealous of for there are people that are so much worse of then me. Powerful poem |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Very well done! |
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