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Beyond the Brink |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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BEYOND THE BRINK 3 November 1999 Sometimes the pain screams red the raw And tugs the push Into the from and jagged corners. The furling weir drags on and trails blazing backward flames of perihelion anguish while all the time hidden deep and as useful as forgotten notes lies … the point? - Owl |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Diana!!! A powerful write! Much enjoyed this piece..which packs a punch. Hugs~Nancy Don't bring me down now, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Nancy said it best |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sometimes the pain screams red the raw And tugs the push Oh Dianna, yes it surely does and if we're lucky, and strong enough... we just push back, and go on... Loved this hon. Very well done.... a  |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Whoa! You have stopped me in my tracks Diana. Wonderful! "while all the time hidden deep and as useful as forgotten notes lies … the point?" |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks, Nancy, Dixie, Donna and Kate. I'm glad you enjoyed it. "The title refers to being over the edge of sanity, beyond what I can bear. "Red" and "raw" refer to the blood of a wound. Tugging and pushing are opposites and therefore the line is a paradox showing the tensions pulling me in different directions. "Into" and "from" (or "out of") are opposites and thus showing either paradoxical movement, or incessant, repetitive, maniacal movement. A corner is a corner is a corner and can only have 2 lines going towards a point. It can't be "jagged", but these corners ARE jagged, and this emphasizes the tensions and the impossibilities of my situation. The "furling weir" is the "whirling sphere" (of the world) gone wrong. It symbolises life and all that goes on, on earth. "Drags" suggests that the earth is forced to do something it doesn't want to - and therefore that people are forced to do what they don't want to do, and more specifically that I don't want to be on this earth whirling around the sun. The earth's orbit around the sun is elliptical and therefore twice a year it is at its nearest to the sun and twice a year it is at its furthest. "Perihelion" is when it is nearest and that is why there are flames of anguish as it burns in the heat. The flames fly backward because the earth is moving forward. Flames consume and thus I am being consumed. The forgotten notes - meant to be ambiguous - musical notes or scribbled notes on paper such as a grocery list - are useless if they are forgotten. And the point of all of this whirling around the sun on an orbiting planet, is as lost and hidden as those notes. The question mark after “the point” takes the point further by questioning whether the point is there at all. The absurdity of all of this life business is heightened by the fact that it was written the day before my birthday, that year." - Owl |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very powerful write!! Excellent! JL  Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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ChaoticHazeLight Member
since 2006-06-13
Posts 71California, U.S. |
I guess there really is no point... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow!!! Diana...I am very impressed!!  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yes, and loved the explanation as well, hence, we learn.... thank you so much for both... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks, JL, ChaoticHazelLight (I think . . smile), Martie and Lee. Glad you enjoyed it. - Owl |
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