Open Poetry #38 |
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The Fly on the Wall |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan ![]() |
The Fly on the Wall 06/29/06 Sometimes I wish that I was as invisible as a ghost just floating along the walls of my life looking inside the room bolted and locked just like the fly in the corner of the ceiling gazing at the scene unfolding before me with eyes that gleamed with a glassy glow And just as the shean started to wane a thought probed my mind like a worm in the dirt it unearthed the truth so as I turned back to the immaculate room the spell was disenchanted and I saw a new light and with this new view I zeroed in on the people Staring into the windows to the blurred faces I tentatively stepped forward, shaking ever slightly and with that small move the bolt started to shift so with every step my confidence did grow until finally I sprinted torwards the glass door and with just one push the door fell unhinged And it was then that my nerves started again but this time around I wasn't afraid for now I'd taken a step in the right direction and by walking through the thresh hold I smiled so bright for in face of the fear I stepped into life |
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Cari07 Junior Member
since 2006-06-28
Posts 33Missouri, US of A |
Wow. You are truly amazing. That's all I really have to say. I don't know what to say, actually... other than that this was very well done. I have a favorite line for you though!!! "and by walking through the thresh hold I smiled so bright for in face of the fear I stepped into life" Great job! *CaRi* |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I really do like your rendition of the fly on the wall. I wrote one with the same title a few years ago. It was written about one of the members here on PIP. (She just never figured it out! LOL.) Nice write. JL ![]() Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"And just as the shean started to wane a thought probed my mind like a worm in the dirt it unearthed the truth" Amazing Jill. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I liked this very much.Thank you for sharing. |
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