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Open Poetry #38

[if I am starving]

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

0 posted 2006-06-28 08:10 PM

if I am starving,
let me eat
the dead.

if I have cancer,
let it spread
like a rumour
entering the city
on a centipede of tongues.

and as I age,
let me smell the decay
of love.

all is lost,
for the only animal
that sins
has left
its footprints
on the moon.

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FiercestCalm
Junior Member

since 2006-06-24

Posts 31
michigan

1 posted 2006-06-28 11:49 PM

i am coming to truly love your work. you have a way of saying things about human beings that is uniquely spot on, even if uncomfortably so for the reader.

"all is lost,
for the only animal
that sins
has left
its footprints
on the moon."

yes, exactly. just like that.

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

2 posted 2006-06-29 12:07 PM

We always leave tracks, don't we, "with a "centipede of tongues." I am so intrigued with your poetic language, uses of phrases and metaphor which would not have occured to me.

~ klassy

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2006-07-01 09:29 PM

I echo the above replies and am actually so taken back by the imagery and intense power of this poem, I don't know what else to say.....you continue to impress me.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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