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She saw a girl reflected
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She saw a girl reflected |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland 
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Tears spilled like tequila on a weeping winters night She laughed hair tangled in whims and fancies Love, a shattered china cup One that is usually kept dusty and out of reach She saw a girl with blackened eyes charred fingernails with a voice like a scratched record stuck on Loop She saw a girl bleeding tears and screaming a lullaby Holding a tattered teddy bear and cooing over its broken bow. She saw a girl watching her reflection with tears in her eyes And hate in her heart. Knowing Oh she knew Never could she look at that reflection and see someone else. Never would she be anything other than a broken cracked Reflection. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this kept my attention all the way through, it was like watching the beginning of a thriller, and I'm screaming for more...I don't mean to make light of the pain that projects from this...but wanted to express the write in its own entity and how good it was to read...excellent write! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ouch  |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
LeeJ and Passing Shadows - thanks a bunch for replying. Much love, cheye xx |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This hurt to read, probably because I relate so deeply....this is perhaps one of your finest pieces Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
Melissa - i was so delighted to see your name again!! I am now going to go read them and I expect to be blown away love Cheye |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
There are a number of great images here. "Tears spilled/ like tequila/ on a weeping winters night" -- tequila usually doesn't get spilled until a fair amount has been consumed. I see someone so drunk on sorrow that the tears are no longer controlled. The "winters night" suggests she is crying alone. The dusty china cup also suggests that the painful feelings are usually kept at the back of a seldom opened cupboard. "screaming a lullaby" suggests an agony and anger over the absence of someone who will soothe her like a lullaby. Thanks for posting this poem. PLEASE VISIT MY WEB SITE http://www.anthonyarmstrong.zoomshare.com |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I can see her...and tears are falling from my eyes in compassion. ~A delicate, yet compelling, piece of writing. You do far more than just play with your crayons.  Loving Light, EA |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Excellent. Very clear images, captivating. |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
Shirtless ~ thanks so much for understanding it so well and taking the time to read and respond. Linda ~ how are you always so impossibly kind? You must be an angel indeed. Vandana & Seraphin ~ thanks so much for the replies, I thought I wrote this ages ago so I am so humbled its gotten these responses now. Much love xxx cheye farewell the ash-tray girl |
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