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Redeeming Qualities
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Redeeming Qualities |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I whispered to him that he wasn’t who he should be. He didn’t hear, taking care to bare himself for the redemption of me. Beautiful man that I cannot resist. You are not something to be missed. Yet I fight to understand how this, my wandering hand, can be the same as twenty hail Mary’s for the damned. Surely, I will need to repent ever more? I woke to find him gone, taking all hope of everlasting with him. Dear God, “who should ever believeth in him..” I smiled as I bobbed my head. I believe. In his powerful biceps. Oh so beautiful full lips. I wish to sleep. This time hoping I find the chalice filled to brim, so I may bring myself to drink from it more fully, again and again. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have a chalice! ME next!!!   It ain't exactly the Holy Grail, sweetie, but yours might be!  gawd I love ya! MUAH |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I loved this, and Karen's reply... Beautiful man that I cannot resist. You are not something to be missed. Yet I fight to understand how this, my wandering hand, can be the same as twenty hail Mary’s for the damned. and this..... I wish to sleep. This time hoping I find the chalice filled to brim, so I may bring myself to drink from it more fully, again and again. hun, I slept all the way through at times, and they were the most life changing experiences for me...to say the least...sign around my neck and all... enjoy life and the moments given... You are a treasure... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Susan To feel this connection, almost holly, to a human man....could feel it. Nicely done! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Sacred passion and your poem is a beautiful redemption itself. Love, Margherita  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 I admit, this is not what it may seem...but I will let the readers take what they will from it. Karen? I adore your chalice! Bring it over!  Martie? Thank you for being you as you are a light around here.LeeJ? You are always there responding and saying so much. Thank you!Margherita, thank you for your sweet words as well! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
you just made this migraine ease up powerfully beautiful write see what magic word images can do? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This takes me to a place.....let's just say, keep dreaming, because once in a while they do come true. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I am not letting you take from me the visual I am "experiencing" from this write LOL, no way! Good one Susan! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I enjoyed your provocative take here on 'redeeming qualities' being comparable to a wandering hand... Smiles. At times, hands can be such a nuisance can't they? Again, enjoyed reading. -Bob |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Visual? Nahhhh...not on your life.... Sheesh, what a write. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the dreamlover for me is merely just that a dream best left on the other side (they become so icky when they stick around too long, ya know? ) love your style |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I've read this a couple of times sweetie, and each time I can see something different in it...and? It's all good!! Hugs, Susan. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Excellent write open to so many interpretations but I'm thinking that Mysteria and I might be on the same wavelength. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you so much for all the wonderful responses and I must say, I have enjoyed the different perspectives. Which is what makes writing/reading great. The larger (and more diverse) the crowd the more diverse the responses. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Susan you write with such wonder....I enjoy your words much my friend....  And so it those we live with |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
In one of your replies you wrote: "I admit, this is not what it may seem...but I will let the readers take what they will from it." Good! Because I really like what I have taken from your poem!  Susan, you are not only an extraordinarily fine writer ~ you are an extraordinarily fine woman with depth and beauty. Sending you a big hug, Linda  |
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