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Swear to God
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Swear to God |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
Vanity inscribed on her tongue… Speaking to me…lying to me…decaying her soul with each word… Crossing her legs attempting to mock his sacrifice…taking away his legacy… With arms entwined…revealing lies…already exposed through teary eyes… Emotional ties…surmised her truth…elliptic fantasies…subside… The lord of the flies…she is…reconciled reviled essences… Expressions detested…lost impressions…truth forever stained… Sustained by pride…hiding the truth she cries… Sublimate fears… emotional tears…reside…hurt from the inside…she dies Circumcised God with 3 lines…I swear to you...I speak the truth...I swear to God Sung her last words…she does…Crumbs have become her lungs… Vocal drums…cleaved…exposing a celestial wound…existence is bleak At heaven’s gates… unaware of God’s blood…running from her cheeks Mocking the Holy trinity…vigorously lacerating divinity… Forbidden is she of voice…exposing herself…through God’s scorn… Mortifying phrases…condemning her…to an afterlife of servility Assimilating hells influence on earth… beaconing her Breathlessly corrupting her worth… Solidifying her position in hell…Lucifer anticipating her arrival Embracing her…he will …I swear to God... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Maybe she will be given another chance ... just a thought born while reading your impressive, drumming lines. The constant opposition of life's influences beckoning, now from Heaven, now from hell ... well... Welcome to Pip! Love, Margherita |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Interesting view Howard. Welcome! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
an interesting offering welcome to these poetry pages and reaching within "for nothing" maybe just translates to reaching with an open mind? thinking about this but will have some chilled wine now thank you its 99F here today and I think I just wilted  |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
^ I am not sure if I understand that? Thx for the responses "How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Whoever "she" is...she has a multitude of problems...seems she was trying to imitate the Christ on the cross...a little difficult to dissect, but very power packed... Good to have you here at Passions. |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
This poem is simply about a female friend of mine who lied about something and she said that she didnt lie and then I ended up catching her up in the lie and she said she crossed her legs so it doesnt count that she swore to god she was telling truth when she knew she lied in the beginning! isnt that rediculous. "How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yep! Must agree, thanx for the explanation. relationships can always have some really weird turns and twists. Good Luck! |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
First of all -- interesting. It has the tone of a preacher who mistakes his outrage for the outrage of god. The bitterness of this diatribe is obviously a response to the words and actions of the woman spoken about. I note that the woman is spoken about, not spoken to. Why is she not addressed directly? (This is only a rhetorical question.) It makes the speaker seem like someone who needed time to prepare a speech of condemnation. There is a lot of rhythm and energy here that lends itself to oral presentation. You should tape yourself reading it. I enjoyed this work. Thanks. PLEASE VISIT MY REGULARLY UPDATED WEB SITE http://www.anthonyarmstrong.zoomshare.com |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
A strong poem, that has its power, yet is fast moving in ways of being read. My issue is more if a poem gives a person a good feeling after it is read, or has them dumb founded. The "What the" syndrome Overall it is the expression that counts and your expression and choice of words is well thought out and creative a poet who cares |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Actually my heart goes out to her...I feel sorry for her that she would find the need to lie so strongly....She has my sympathy...her life will be a lonely dark one with out the light of truth in it...Powerful poem...*big hugs* |
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