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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
The energy flow has gone down like the sunset while the crickets bark at dusk. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smiling at "crickets bark..." Sweet little write. TD |
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GTP Junior Member
since 2006-06-18
Posts 35NC...USA |
I love the picture you bestow Jody but would change it as so...you have 2 "the's" which are not needed! The energy flow has gone down like sunset, while crickets bark at dusk. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetKimberly~ This is marvelously done~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Perfect reflection of a sunset moment! Love, Margherita |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
ThisDiamond, Thank you for your Smile  I wanted the crickets to bark not bite. GTP, Thank you for your constructive input, it is always valuable. Sweet Marge, I wrote this for you. I love you. Margherita, Thank you as well for your comments they mean alot to me Huggs to you all |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very nicely done. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Pesky little critters, huh? I can feel the drain...and fittingly, hear those little buggers starting their chorus. |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
The energy flow has gone down like the sunset while the crickets bark at dusk. I think this is about a rebirth, like u have reached the peak of your life and the constant reminders of ageism has became so annoying like a "crickets bark", literally crickets can be annoying and a pest, but at the same time they could mean (metaphorically) as a kind tranqulity like when u go into the country and at night u hear the crickets the "comforting crickets" kind of takes u away to a wonderland, escaping reality for a breif momment, but now crickets small chirp (reminders of seniority) has became a pestering "bark". "dusk" can be death which is a rebirth another tranquil momment in life without having all the earthly worries that one has with age...anyways good write just my interpretation...keep writing elevation is the key "How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Enjoyed the comparison, Jody. *hugs*....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
enjoyed this |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Thank All of you so very much for your appreciation of my Poetry. I didn't know so many few words would bring so many responces. God Bless you Huggs to you all... Kimberly |
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