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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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I wander into the desert aching to feel the midday sun burn bearing down on me taking my breath away my bare feet slide over hot sand tiny bells at my ankles the only sound where the cactus blooms purple there is water sweet clear from mountain snow it slides over red rock splashes into sand pool I trail my fingers in the coolness dream people places that live only on the border of my soul serpent sleeping on warm rock lifts his head stares at me with hooded eyes wonders what foolish creature dares disturb his reverie it is said serpents are afraid of humans shall I stay if he kills me it shall only be a small death |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I sit trail my fingers in the coolness dream people places that live only on the border of my soul me too what an ending this has! A fine write! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you so much passing shadows. I hope your dreams come true. |
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GTP Junior Member
since 2006-06-18
Posts 35NC...USA |
such dreams are the things life is made of....very nice! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you GTP. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A perfectly wonderful write...much enjoyed.  Hugs~Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you for your reply Nancy. Hugs, Kate |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lady~ Invited, I stepped into your desert and found the warmth to my liking~ Beautiful penning, poetess~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady, In the circle of change life is but a small death. A pleasure to read. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Awesome write...spectacular images. Patricia |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I am glad you enjoyed yourself Marge. Thank you for your kind reply. And everything does change, doesn’t it Sy? Thank you sir. Thank you so much Patricia. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So vivid are your words, as to take me to the place of your muse. So peaceful. TD |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I am glad you came along TD. Thank you. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Must agree with TD, very vivid...and the ending, WHAM! Loved it. |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
"stares at me with hooded eyes" "where the cactus blooms purple" "over red rock " I liked the vivid imagery thoughout this nice...these r my favorite parts. It think that it could use a revision but no poem is without err so keep wrting...Elevation is the key Return the favor on: Swear to God |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
where the cactus blooms purple there is water sweet clear from mountain snow it slides over red rock splashes into sand pool Your "heat" made me thirsty and the above lines beautifully stilled my thirst... We can still our thirst with beauty ... Thank you! Love, Margherita |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady A small death...I've written those words, yet wonder if any death ever is. Very poignant feeling to this. |
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Serena Junior Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 47 |
Very sad and ominous... It makes you want to reach out and tell this person that they are not alone. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you Magnus. The ending has special meaning for me. Poetic Concept, I appreciate your reply. Thank you so much Margherita. I am glad my words stilled your thirst. Hugs, Kate Ahhhh Martie. That’s a good question. Perhaps even the smallest death has great meaning. Thank you Serena, for your kind reply. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, I enjoyed the walk in the hot, hot desert with you so very much, celebrated the burning sun, admired the cactus blooms, was mesmerised by the coolness of the water, but by the time you saw the snake, you had got too far ahead of me so that you couldn't hear my voice calling out to you not to fear him, as he would only hurt you if you threatened him - and being who you are you wouldn't, so he (or she?) wouldn't. I loved your ending - I don't know what that special meaning is that you alluded to, to Magnus, but I saw the death as both powerful and paradoxically peaceful - a sort of fading into Nature (and thus a sort of rebirth in a different form) - it had a sort of Little Prince feel about it - remember when the snake bit him and he seemed to have died, but was actually transported back to his own planet. Thus the death you referred to seemed more a translocation/transformation than a death. - Owl |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Oh Diana. You read me so well. I heard you tell me not to fear him. That’s why I dared stay. The small death is both powerful and paradoxically peaceful! I remember the snake from the Little Prince and my small death is precisely that… a breathless, wonderful transformation. Hugs to you and the furry ones. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lady ms, enjoyed this view, they say a thousand small deaths are heavenly, beyond description. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you Stranger. If I do not fear perhaps I shall discover the truth. |
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