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limoade dreams and koffee
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limoade dreams and koffee |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you have grins on your chin and your lady is back for awhile but I will work on that in the minutes between oh god yes and mercy me you play with my hands like you have known them since before your dream times but you close your eyes to make them strangers the river is dry now there under the cottonwood but you wade anyway with your hem up high and your toes in the standstill I touch your shoulder then with the tips of my eyes you shiver and say it is cold with the sun just watching and reading your mind as you roll bedroom windows down ______________ daark scribblenote:limo ride and jabberwalk conversation [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (06-21-2006 09:12 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
you play with my hands like you have known them since before your dream times but you close your eyes to make them strangers There is such deep feeling flowing through your poem. The mind and the senses co-work. I love it. Love, Margherita |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you have grins on your chin and your lady is back for awhile but I will work on that in the minutes between oh god yes and mercy me you play with my hands like you have known them since before your dream times but you close your eyes to make them strangers YOUR AMAZING |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh mercy... and what the others said, too... I think I need to schedule a limo ride.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lady friends, ms Mar'ita, Leej, and Sun, thanks so much to each of you D |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
You sure don't miss much, my daark friend. Hands and eyes always speak volumes. I love how easy this one feels. ~ klassy |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
enjoyed Hollow heroes seperate as they run...Shadows linger in your pain dead and done |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"the river is dry now there under the cottonwood but you wade anyway with your hem up high and your toes in the standstill" Sigh... 'nough said. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I really love how you weave words and images. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
What can I say? Being struck wordless is a terrible thing for a poet, yet wordless I am. This work is perfect. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
humble thanks to each of you you bless me with your consideration |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
very nice....love the unclearness of this...how it makes the images of emotions stick in the reader's mind |
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