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On the beach |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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at Santa Cruz Monday morning at 10 you will find an egg yolk of clouded sun hanging uncertain mothers their babies held close in slings toddlers glissading at water’s edge waves whispering “Shhhhh… don’t frighten the little ones” the mothers sit on blankets nurse the babies hand out politically correct snacks granola, gogurt, juice boxes and chat relieved they have made it through another weekend husbands, lovers, partners have returned to work leaving them with the sand, the sun and the children on the beach at Santa Cruz Monday morning at 10 you will find mother, babies, toddlers and one old crone wearing cuffed jeans and a watch cap sitting with her back against the bluff drawing in the sand |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I loved this, Lady!  ~ Every vividly descriptive word of it!  EA |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
Beautiful poetry Lady, very nice walk on the beach, the winter nearing the half way mark and today the sun was in the sky a little bit it has what seems to be a month or so of cloudy days and snowy dreams ... but this return to the sea side and to draw in the sand once again....well this gave me hope and the little bit of a helping hand ..returning to the warm light that a day on the beach( toes in the sand lol )can offer ....glad i read it !!! : ) ~wolfie [This message has been edited by aujussy wolf (01-11-2006 05:39 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"you will find mother, babies, toddlers and one old crone wearing cuffed jeans and a watch cap sitting with her back against the bluff drawing in the sand" And there might be two...lol...if I were in Santa Cruz! Very delightful write!  jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile I need a vacation so bad right now, and it's simply impossible for me at the present time, so I thank you for the brief respite you offer here. and? glissading that's one of those things I knew existed but never knew the term for, so thank you for that too...you captured that as well. Enjoyed.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
and one old crone wearing cuffed jeans and a watch cap sitting with her back against the bluff drawing in the sand ohhhh how I love this description which best describes her....what a pleasant read...could hear the excited voices, feel the salt air, and of course, that effervesant sound of the old crone, lapping her full versed lips on the sand... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
On behalf of the old crone, thank you for noticing her in the corner of your poem. I hope some of the people on the beach did too and gave her at least a smile or two. I loved your poem. - Owl |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Great Job... Very well done |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful! I could actually feel the warm sand underfoot.. Beautiful imagery. Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow, I swear I could smell the surf, feel the sand....and where is the sun tan oil? Excellent!!! Thank You... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
You are all so kind. Thank you. The old crone thanks you too. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Idyllic...the thought of sunshine is so appealing midst all the winter rain. I live near the beach, but summer is still a mere dream in the distance. Such wishful thinking this provokes for this Klassy old crone! ~ Karen ~ Thank you, too, for making me welcome at PIP. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thanks for your response Karen. I'm glad you're with us.  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
at 10 you will find mother, babies, toddlers and one old crone wearing cuffed jeans and a watch cap sitting with her back against the bluff drawing in the sand ~*~ I love being included...  Thank you! |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Sun, Sea, Sand and babies... I love it, the imagery is fantastic. It makes me want to go to the beach, though i'm not sure you can get the same level of enjoyment wrapped up like a polar bear.  Great writing Kate, I really enjoyed the read. Andrew |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Nice write The lady. Enjoyed. JL |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You paint a vivid and heart warming picture, dear Lady~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So Great! Enjoyed your view. TD |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
You’re welcome Sunshine!  Thank you for your kind words Andrew, JL BluesSerenade and TD. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
this is a fantastic piece - wonderfully visual. ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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