Open Poetry #37 |
Man Magik Under Sin Tree |
Bagger Vance Member
since 2006-02-01
Posts 108Aotearoa |
I have many steps That make magic moves When you look like that And I reach like this Your voice Music in the alldaynightlong I melt tree shade My quick is slow to your motions And that's just the way it is For you told me How to sing Man to woman Lyrics And I never since then Looked back down But waterfall up To the night of many sky Where moon is sun lust And grass is caravan smooth For your porch whispers So much more aware So much more in want BV © Copyright 6.2005 White Gold Wielder |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
BV, enjoyable dance of quill here can imagine the long limbs of such a tree blotting enough sun to make whispers appropriate |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
very expressive wisp of music here. i liked the flow, the wording and the style in which you presented your thoughts. usually it's one of those, two on a good day, three is enough to make me smile. thanks. ps - is that a reference to Covenant at the bottom? my all-time favorite series. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bagger Vance You took me down the hill of wit and on the bottom I sit. Enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Aha! I knew if Dark Stranger were to happen upon this charming, witty and intriguing piece of love poetry, that he would enjoy it! ~ and he did! ~ As did I! To love & loving and being loved! EA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"For you told me How to sing Man to woman Lyrics And I never since then Looked back down But waterfall up" I enjoy the way you play with words, Bagger Vance...very nice! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
And I never since then Looked back down But waterfall up and that is what love does and should do to one, no matter what the ending. this was as a two-tone red & white rose, so perfect it doesn't look real, but is... wonderfully written |
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Bagger Vance Member
since 2006-02-01
Posts 108Aotearoa |
DS aye.. they be that and sublimely more dark brother CHRISTOPHER tis so friend Chris.. you have the right of it..my thanks for your stop by and your kind words.. blessings to your pen poet friend ST ah.. down the hill is righteous in their own move yes? thank you friend poet for your eyes cast EA grins.. yes friend poetess.. tis that it be.. great to see you here once again MARTIE delighted he is that his play entertained you friend poet.. honored more he be for your eyes here LJ that's some damn fine words you speak friend poet.. am honored and humbled.. blessings much to your pen in turn White Gold Wielder |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Exquisite! I am humble in your presence. This is truly a 'sigh' in the making. Well done Sir. Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ohhh...I very much delighted in reading this and I love this style of writing and the word play is pure poetry in motion to read... tis truly a sigh maker. So nice to read you this evening. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
smiling here, and enjoying the sensual rhythmic flow |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Very good |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am absolutely hooked on your work. Carry on |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nice flow of images, enjoyed the read..carry on poet friend |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"When you look like that And I reach like this Your voice Music in the alldaynightlong" Ummmm... delicous. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Very well penned, enjoyed it very much Charisma |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bagger~ 'moon is sun lust' Make mine a double dose, please~ You've entered these poetic halls with a real beauty~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Bagger Vance Member
since 2006-02-01
Posts 108Aotearoa |
my friends............ thank you muchly one and all for your kind words and your eyes on him White Gold Wielder |
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