Open Poetry #37 |
Clayton Avenue |
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
So much snow Upon the ground Light without heat Or nourishment On leafless trees How many words we’ve heard Over all these years Rippled waters of a river Passing under a wooden bridge |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I don't quite understand why this one has been commented on...but you have crafted this one very carefully...and like the deafening effect of a heavy snow...so are the words of our lives...interesting and thought provoking write... |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
Reminds me of a complex japanese/chinese poem using nature as its course of action rather than the wording of others |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
"Rippled waters of a river Passing under a wooden bridge" can not ignore this.... Rippled water means spring, wooden bridge means warm.. you have been use iron bridge before or after. beautiful poems. hope! |
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