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Sometimes There is Silence
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Sometimes There is Silence |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Forgive me... I can't remember when I've slept last. I needed to take a break from work.  Sometimes There is Silence ©2006 C.G. Ward walked through darkness tonight, gathering a billowy fog into my mind to clear the pathway for consciousness. didn’t work, ah well. the midnight sky was there, though… could feel it pressing down on my shoulders like the weight of intoxication smiling crookedly through an insipid clangor clogging the aural pores at ye olde local pubbery. gotta love them drunk chicks. but I was talking about fog and consciousness: of the fog – there is silence. it isn’t the near-silence of a quasi-civilized, barely-homogenized, querulous society saturated with the hum of refrigerators and electricity, sirens and the incessant irritation of hormonal-infected teenaged boys burnin’ n’ churnin’ all four wheels into the pavement at 3 am just to “impress” the current object of their five minute lust… (it don’t jump to fifteen ‘til they’re twenty or so) Fog, you see, is a real silence. it is the silence of history, and a universe that ‘supposedly’ hums - like the fridge. but that’s just an analogy for the consciousness I’m a-searchin’ for, anyway, a method by which some pretend to profundity while sipping martinis with the rest of the ‘boomers. this silence is real. it is emptiness, the absence of. I yearn for that sometimes, but only find it in her eyes… and only when she tells me she loves me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Fog, you see, is a real silence. it is the silence of history, and a universe that ‘supposedly’ hums - like the fridge." and "this silence is real. it is emptiness, the absence of. I yearn for that sometimes, but only find it in her eyes… and only when she tells me she loves me." C, if this is what the lack of sleep does to ya, then maybe you oughtta write everything in a sleep deprived daze. Damn fine lines up there bud, even for this time of the morning...  |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
ah, D, that's not fair - you can't reply all nice and praising to me until I get to your overdue not-poem! (i emailed it to myself so i won't forget...)  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
It's the brutal hour C. My mind doesn't grasp 7 AM from this side of the day... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've almost captured the fog... I just didn't feel the chill.  Good one, Son. Very, very good. . |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh Christopher, those last lines are lovely. I often find such beauty in this world in the oddest things that make me sad because they are so beautiful, like the fog, the silence, the eyes. This reminded me of Trainspotting. The words. You know them? |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"the midnight sky was there, though… could feel it pressing down on my shoulders like the weight of intoxication smiling crookedly" "Fog, you see, is a real silence. it is the silence of history, and a universe that ‘supposedly’ hums - like the fridge. this silence is real. it is emptiness, the absence of." "I yearn for that sometimes, but only find it in her eyes… and only when she tells me she loves me." now that last part....  *how sweet*always enjoy reading you Kissy  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"this silence is real. it is emptiness, the absence of. I yearn for that sometimes, but only find it in her eyes… and only when she tells me she loves me" The kind of lines you have to do a double take on....like a beautiful woman walking down the street..you just can't help it.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
All I wanna know is how did I end up feeling so satisfied? Rare acheivement, there, C. We should do this more often. beautiful glimpse into her eyes |
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Fee Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 381Melbourne, Australia |
My Mum used to say "Silence is Golden", I think this captured what she has always tried to explain. Enjoyed, Hugs Fee Expressions, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I enjoyed the ethereal feel to this write. Your closing lines were especially appealing. Linda |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"but I was talking about fog and consciousness:" Oh. I really like this poem. Amazing. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
thank you, everyone, for your time and responses. your input in appreciated. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I'm left speechless...as always... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this silence is real. it is emptiness, the absence of. I yearn for that sometimes, but only find it in her eyes… and only when she tells me she loves me. there's something so sweet about this M |
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Musicmaker1969
since 2000-06-25
Posts 589Peterborough, Ontario Canada |
Fog you see is a real silence. I totally agree. As one who suffers from Chronic Fatigue Syndrome, we often experience what is called Fibro-fog. It's as if we are awake but only physically. Our heads seem to be in a very thick fog that we can't pull out of. But my favourite part of your poem were the lines: I yearn for that sometimes, but only find it in her eyes… and only when she tells me she loves me." This is beautiful. I hope "she" knows how special she is in your eyes. Sheri Adams Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I enjoyed these ponderful fog footfalls. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
very nice My spirit will rise |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This is brilliant... |
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