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Jack Straw
Member

since 2006-03-02

Posts 70

0 posted 2006-05-15 05:27 PM

While walking absently out my screen door,
on Mother’s day morning,
I was frozen in perfect silence,
sent into heavenly reverie,
newborn light
bid my soul
welcome.

I lost command of my limbs
No longer paying heed
to what my mind commanded
they now listened to only my soul
Granting its every wish and whim

My cigarette fell
still smoking
to the earthen ground
Fell from trembling lips
and quaking fingers
detained in the authority of my soul

my eyes enlarged
my emerald irises
eclipsed by the dark star of my pupil
Wistful eyes
soft eyes,
ever moistened by soft tears
freefalling down my groveling face

and my knees buckled
without my telling them so
to greet the damp Earth
My nose purely
delighted by the wonderful aroma
of the newly born dew
As euphoric as any opiate

clasping Mother Nature
in a simple embrace
that
I would give to any loved one
any mother
on this empowering morning.

My wistful eyes wept
much needed tears
in the depths of
Mother’s embrace.

[This message has been edited by Jack Straw (05-15-2006 08:13 PM).]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2006-05-15 10:44 PM

Gripping write...a sense of returning home.
Well done.
TD

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2006-05-16 01:24 PM

I love it,
I LOVE it,
I LOVE IT,
I LLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLOVVVVE ITTTT!!!!!!!!!!

Thank you. I, too, have a very close relationship with Nature!

- Owl

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2006-05-16 01:48 PM

This is most excellent writing!!
Love it indeed!
Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

Jack Straw
Member

since 2006-03-02

Posts 70

4 posted 2006-05-16 07:19 PM

I also llllooovvve this one

. Seriously though, I'm quite proud of it. thanks for your interest TD, Owl, and Enchantress.

[This message has been edited by Jack Straw (05-17-2006 06:58 AM).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2006-05-16 08:05 PM

"my eyes enlarged
my emerald irises
eclipsed by the dark star of my pupil
Wistful eyes
soft eyes,
ever moistened by soft tears
freefalling down my groveling face"

you paint such a vivid picture! Very enjoyable read.

‘I want to swim away
but don’t know how
sometimes it feels
just like I’m falling
in the ocean’
~Blue October

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2006-05-16 08:41 PM

Nicely done, the feelings flow freely
within the poem....and I can feel your
feelings through your words.

Rainbowdust
Member

since 2002-12-05

Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

7 posted 2006-05-17 06:32 AM

Wonderful!!!

Into my library it goes!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

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