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fmlbarebackrider2001
Member

since 2005-11-16

Posts 138
West Texas, United States

0 posted 2006-05-14 12:02 PM

We laid you in the ground today.
As the sun blazed over head.
Too young some said in whispered words.
Too young to be taken so fast.

Why does it happen that way?
The young and the truely good.
Taken from this Earth way too soon.
When the bad seem to live forever.
Infecting others with their rot.

Walking from your grave a single tear falls.
I think about the lives you touched.
The good you brought to mine.
A stray dog and a man
Saved by the love that filled your heart.

So, good-bye my friend.
Until the day we meet again.
May you dance at God's feet.

Know yourself before you try to know someone else.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2006-05-14 09:24 AM

quote:
So, good-bye my friend.
Until the day we meet again.
May you dance at God's feet.

Beautiful last thought! So sad, yes, there are mysteries we are not able to unveil yet.

Heartfelt tribute.
Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2006-05-14 02:23 PM

I am so sorry to hear of this excruciating sadness. Lay a flower for me, if you will, and honour the stray dog and the man for him/her.

- Owl

Jack Straw
Member

since 2006-03-02

Posts 70

3 posted 2006-05-14 03:13 PM

I like this poem but in my opinion the 2nd stanza is weaker than the rest

Why does it happen that way?
The young and the truely good.
Taken from this Earth way too soon.
When the bad seem to live forever.
Infecting others with their rot.

I think it would be more effective if you reworded it.

side note: a school teacher of mine died last morning from a heart attack, very shockng, very saddening indeed. He was 50some years old, younger than most, older than some. My condolences to your loss. things are gonna get better

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2006-05-14 03:14 PM

So, good-bye my friend.
Until the day we meet again.
May you dance at God's feet

Absolutely beautiful....what a wonderful sentiment....

fmlbarebackrider2001
Member

since 2005-11-16

Posts 138
West Texas, United States

5 posted 2006-05-14 10:48 PM

Thank you for all the kind words. It has been rough but it will get better, I know. This poem is a little different than most of mine but it was written late at night when my emotions were a little raw.

Know yourself before you try to know someone else.

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