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tatalinia
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0 posted 2006-05-10 10:28 PM



you have set me back to a whole new level
trying to beat the one we were on you ruined that
stuck in the middle with no where to go but down
thought we were goin up thought we could move on
til it was all taken back by the ring of a line
the strength of your touch no longer within my grasp
i hurt so much inside my tears keep falling
trust thrown out the door love sails
i cant get away from the yesterdays

I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health

© Copyright 2006 Althia Kinsey - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-05-11 12:13 PM


simple could use some ellaborance..but i do like the last line, its kinda out of the box for me...nice job
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2 posted 2006-05-11 12:14 PM


Love gone bad...is always sad. It's a good thing though, that you can write it right out of your system (that's what some will tell you anyway)
Sure you can.
Good luck!

bubblesleave
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3 posted 2006-05-11 12:36 PM


Oh, MY!

Wonderful!!!!

tatalinia
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4 posted 2006-05-11 01:07 AM


I wrote this poem in like 2 minutes, it was what i was feeling so i had to write it out. its the only way i can get through my pain.

I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health

bubblesleave
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5 posted 2006-05-11 01:40 AM


I understand the pain.

It is soooo beautiful though!!!!!!!!!!!

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6 posted 2006-05-11 04:03 AM


I relate here

another great write

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