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tatalinia Member
since 2005-12-17
Posts 137CA, US 
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you have set me back to a whole new level trying to beat the one we were on you ruined that stuck in the middle with no where to go but down thought we were goin up thought we could move on til it was all taken back by the ring of a line the strength of your touch no longer within my grasp i hurt so much inside my tears keep falling trust thrown out the door love sails i cant get away from the yesterdays I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health |
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Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
simple could use some ellaborance..but i do like the last line, its kinda out of the box for me...nice job |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Love gone bad...is always sad. It's a good thing though, that you can write it right out of your system (that's what some will tell you anyway) Sure you can.  Good luck! |
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bubblesleave Member
since 2006-03-04
Posts 197Bloomington, IN |
Oh, MY! Wonderful!!!! |
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tatalinia Member
since 2005-12-17
Posts 137CA, US |
I wrote this poem in like 2 minutes, it was what i was feeling so i had to write it out. its the only way i can get through my pain. I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health |
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bubblesleave Member
since 2006-03-04
Posts 197Bloomington, IN |
I understand the pain. It is soooo beautiful though!!!!!!!!!!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I relate here another great write |
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