Open Poetry #37 |
Once |
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
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Once Once, you were beautiful to me when the leaves were full on the trees when I dried my clothes by summer breeze, and with the air of breaking dawn moist upon my lips I must have forgotten beauty fades with age. ~ Once, I was beautiful to you and we, as naked as trees in winter lay in passionate embraces, trying to cross the limits of time to squeeze in all that we could and still finding something left behind. ~ Once, we were beautiful, in those early hazy morning hours and the dreams we held so tightly were as real as the warmth we gave against the cold that crept in through the cracks in the floor. ~ Once, I could look into your eyes and imagine the world was beautiful, a mere touch sent me into happiness and there was never any truth in saying that I could let go of the warm humid hours of semi-darkness or the long nights of numbing cold when there was no need for flannel PJs. ~ Once, you and I were beautiful and the sky was our canvas we, recklessly painted our dreams in cobalt blue, sprinkled them with random dashes of velveted crimson, sprayed them with tiny specks of moon silver, and outlined them with streams of 24K gold... creating a work of art that was so beautiful we could not touch it... not even once. ~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this flowed lovely all the way through |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, THis write is as lovely as you. |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
I really like this so full of emotion. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
This was so touching Hope |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
written with deep emotion. enjoyed. You Are Loved |
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Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
Once, I could look into your eyes and imagine the world was beautiful, ....only line id consider changing.... the ending was terrific, and the visuals were very good...bye byes |
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sweetberry Member
since 2006-03-29
Posts 125 |
This was beautiful...Miss Dixie |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Lovely, Dixie, and, yes, a tremendous ending! |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Dixie...Touching and sad at the same time. Enjoyed...Paul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thanks to each of you your comments mean so much |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
this was so full of emotion and so well done, I could just feel it here, thanks for sharing and keep up the awesome poetry. Poetry can get you very far |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Wow Miss Dixie, this is sooo fine! :-) |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Passing Shadows, Your writing ALWAYS touches me, as if you know a part of me. It is, again, good to read your poetry. misc'e |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dixie...So lovely this, you! |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Dixie you are a beautiful poet. Martie said it, and I reiterate! Magical memories and untouchable (he)art...your poem. Lovely. ~ Klassy |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: ... because you were one, it was inside, untouchable, but it WAS! And the memory lasts into forever, as you show with this beautiful touching write, dear Dixie. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thank you each I'm honored by your replies. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow ~ Exquisitely penned, beautiful imagery and sentiment. SIGHS - the romantic in me loves this! It's one of your best Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Debo Member
since 2006-04-18
Posts 321Texas U.S.A. |
What passion flows into this poem. Such a wonderful write. Debo |
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