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JesusChristPose
Senior Member

since 2005-06-21

Posts 777
Pittsburgh, Pa

0 posted 2006-05-08 09:29 PM

{Revised}

Like a hole that’s split in two
And then fallen in by three

Like a void that never fills
While sinking in a sea

Like tension in a rope
I can't exhale a sigh

Like yesterdays demands
Tomorrows won't pass by

Like a million thoughts in one
All tangled up in blue

Like a bell for whom it tolls
Whose chime is overdue

These feelings will not leave
I can’t show them the door
They take up all my space
But still they ask for more

"Melvin, the best thing you got going for you is your willingness to humiliate yourself."

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2006-05-08 09:32 PM

Man, dontcha just hate being crowded out of your own space?
Hugs to you, wishing for more brilliant sunshine in your days and nights. Or more poetry, anyway.

juj1
Junior Member

since 2006-05-08

Posts 22
Laval Quebec Ca

2 posted 2006-05-08 09:47 PM

Pationate write. The emotions revealed to us is so stricking and elegant. Well done.

El_Campeador
Senior Member

since 2003-01-29

Posts 761
Ohio, USA

3 posted 2006-05-08 11:34 PM

"Like a million thoughts in one
All tangled up in blue"
Neat picture... What a wonder it is to begin to experience this...
Thank you for sharing your thoughts!

Ben

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-05-09 04:46 AM

yes, more poetry indeed!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2006-05-09 02:06 PM

"These feelings will not leave
I can’t show them the door
They take up all my space
But still they ask for more"

Loved that stanza Mike.
Something we can all relate to from time to time.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

RedStoneEB
Senior Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

6 posted 2006-05-09 02:41 PM

These feelings will not leave
I can’t show them the door
They take up all my space
But still they ask for more

Beautiful words of wisdom and understanding of emotions

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2006-05-09 05:19 PM

Nice writing...James

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