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bens101
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since 2006-05-05
Posts 32


0 posted 2006-05-08 02:29 AM





   Don't know where I am
   I think I'm lost
   spiraling through space
   unable to touch
   the things that I love.


   Everything is black
   I can't see the light
   where am I now
   won't you guide me
   I'm begging you to hold my hand.


   This is horrible
   am I really dead
   or just lost
   because no one cares
   about my boring pathetic life.


   I awake at night
   to scream my name
   won't you take me away
   let me be free
   I hate this place so much.
   Benjamin Prins  2006.

    I had a burst of imagination. I timed myself to
    write this, it took
   me 3 minutes and 46 seconds. This is not me, i
   would never think
   like this, but i love taking different peoples  
   perspectives on
   life and injecting emotion into it, which tells a
   story.


   I think I did a good job with this, conjuring up
   images.
   What do you think?

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juj1
Junior Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 22
Laval Quebec Ca
1 posted 2006-05-08 03:55 AM


It's a fast poem with few seconds to spare.
Brings forth a rythmn I enjoy where I must read the poem a
couple of times to actually feel an emotion that you only get on the first rush. Greatly enjoyed.

I regret the sins of the past and face my doom to the bitter end...

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