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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2006-05-06 05:21 PM

we
were
once
one
dandelion

sharing
a
stem

but you
leave,

our crown
flies off,

white feathers
on the
cross winds,

you go places

and i
can only
dream,

standing
stembound

married
to the
earth
that
holds me,

i have
no choice

but
to release

and wish
you well.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2006-05-06 06:18 PM

inkedgoddess
Such a lovely sigh.

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

2 posted 2006-05-06 07:57 PM

I have always liked the way you write. This sounds sad, though.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2006-05-06 08:53 PM

Such a bittersweet sigh...lovely Michele.
Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

poettothecars
Senior Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 1093
New Zealand

4 posted 2006-05-07 05:42 AM

I enjoyed this one, a wonderful read and freshing

a poet who cares

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2006-05-07 10:09 AM

Pain moulded delicately into exquisite beauty and everlasting wisdom!

- Owl

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

6 posted 2006-05-07 11:32 AM

How exquisite! Dandelions are so fickle! I for one can not resist their sunshine, however.

~ klassy

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2006-05-07 12:37 PM

InkyOne~
This one likes me ... bunches~
Could have something to do with all those dandelions on my lawn~
I like where you took this poignant thought~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2006-05-07 05:01 PM

good read

shades of paul
Member

since 2005-12-14

Posts 370
In Reality

9 posted 2006-05-07 05:19 PM

"married
to the
earth
that
holds
me"
..................loved it !
paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

10 posted 2006-05-07 06:02 PM

Simple pure imagery! Excellent.

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

11 posted 2006-05-07 06:45 PM

Excellent use of imagery and expression, poignant and softly powerful....I do relate and will save this for someone.

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

12 posted 2006-05-07 10:21 PM

Lovely way to write sad. I love this. martyjo

jody5
Senior Member

since 2005-12-21

Posts 876
California, U.S.A.

13 posted 2006-05-07 10:30 PM

Inkedgoddess that was perfectly written sad but oh so well done.

Huggs Kimberly

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

14 posted 2006-05-07 10:30 PM

Great imagery here Mish!
I enjoy the way you present life's vicissitudes
riding on the spent petals of a dandelion.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

15 posted 2006-05-12 02:07 PM

The dandelion holds deep meaning to me...it's very nature both of air and earth. I loved your poem!

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

16 posted 2006-05-12 02:13 PM

Lovely, indeed!

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

17 posted 2006-06-02 09:03 AM

Lovely, poignant, [sad as Sy has noted]
Caught on the wind,
dandelion puff dreams,
scatter everywhere-
no limit in this vast sky,
whether rooted or unrooted.

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