shirtless
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2006-04-30
12:07 PM
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FIVE CARD STUD
not much of a fighter so I spent the night on a park bench and used my bleeding arm as a pillow
not much of a lover if I count the beds I’ve been to then the ones I’ve been to twice
not much of a husband for I’ve been to Paris by myself and often eat alone
not much of a father when I fear a hug’s a species thing
not much of a poker player unless I’m bluffing now
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© Copyright
2006
Anthony Armstrong
- All Rights Reserved
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shmity72
Junior Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 26
wa usa
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2006-04-30
12:40 PM
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as a former degenerate gambler: I enjoyed it very much.slaves 'oft love their masters.
GBS
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OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
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2006-04-30
08:55 AM
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Much enjoyed! Loved the dénoument. However, did you really mean "species" - or perhaps "special"?
- Owl
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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
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2006-04-30
10:45 AM
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I must admit that when I first read your username, I thought, "Oh, oh! How did pip's powers that be, let that one get past the radar?!?" lol
I echo 's reply!
EA
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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
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2006-04-30
10:58 AM
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Leaves the reader with a sense of not knowing.
Well done. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~
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shirtless
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since 2006-04-29
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2006-04-30
11:01 AM
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Hello Owl, I did mean species. It is meant to convey the idea that the display of affection in a hug is a biological response that is merely an action common to the species. The father in the poem may fear that his love for his children is somehow instinctual rather than personal. Regards, Shirtless
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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
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posted
2006-04-30
05:15 PM
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cool write...I like it
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Debo
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since 2006-04-18
Posts 321
Texas U.S.A.
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2006-05-01
12:26 PM
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great play with words and a great write as well I enjoyed reading this one today.Debo
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Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
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2006-05-01
07:12 PM
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Wow...!!
Eric
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