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Open Poetry #37
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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2006-04-26 09:11 AM

Rewrite:


She

Satiates my visions field
Shunting lily pads away
Making daffodils to stay

Bringing pristine valley green
Hewing colors mystic new
Resurrecting Randy’s view

Using wings of flattery
Soothes away my wrinkled brow
Allowing time to slow some how

Piercing through the blind of veil
The Jonah whale that swallowed me
Forever searching in the sea

Zen me into life again a
Coup that melts the foil of true
Made me whole, made me new

And though I’m full to overstuff
Just love for her, seems not enough
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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2006-04-26 09:37 AM



all men should be as such..

Morning Sy!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~
Sunshine
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2 posted 2006-04-26 10:10 AM


She does, indeed.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2006-04-26 01:39 PM

She's a very lucky lady Sy!
A most excellent read.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words,
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~
The Lady
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4 posted 2006-04-26 04:02 PM


She sounds like love and magic.


Earth Angel
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5 posted 2006-04-26 05:22 PM

Now that is some kinda woman! Hang on to her! She's a keeper! She does all that and still manages to keep your Randy dandy! Flirty 2

And her man is an ever so sweet sonneteer!


EA
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2006-04-26 06:03 PM

Susan,
And all women too. LOL

Sunshine


Nancy,
Too

Lady
A little of both.

Earth Angel
I haven't heard Randy complain. LOL
passing shadows
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7 posted 2006-04-26 06:37 PM

another joy to read
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2006-04-26 07:50 PM

passing,
Your read and comment gives me joy. Thank you.
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