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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast

0 posted 2006-04-25 07:29 AM



you came to the ocean often
in tennis shoes of thought
almost barefoot nude on occasion
when your woman wanted to dance

and there was music seeping down
the fuzzy concrete of blue stew
and their electric gray pastiches
pococurante to pulchritude

you brought your mountains also
with the handle ends willing
to make the tides want your texture
and the coat room of your secrets

there were horizons you dreamed of
in gawdy gowns that were revealing
like the blue stone you worshiped
when it marked the dark's forehead

as another early indigo morning


______________

daark

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mariae
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since 2006-04-24
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Denmark, Europe
1 posted 2006-04-25 07:37 AM


I am there...visualizing it all

Maria

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2006-04-25 07:41 AM



One could never be indifferent
to rites such as this...




Dark Stranger
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West Coast
3 posted 2006-04-25 07:47 AM


thank you Mar' for the review.

___________

ms sun, thanks to you for your touch

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
4 posted 2006-04-25 09:34 AM


I feel the need for the ocean on this morning..

You always take us there Mr. D.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

WindWalker
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5 posted 2006-04-25 09:47 AM


The imagery in this was very good. I like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28
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Oregon
6 posted 2006-04-25 12:37 PM


The colors implied in this make my heart sigh, D, indigo mornings and possible coral dawns, mountains green and turqoise oceans.  A pulse is soft here...  in duplicate.

~ K

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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7 posted 2006-04-25 01:22 PM


yes....you captured her lovely spirit well..
tender, caring and sharing of your words D.

"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take ...
but by the moments that take our breath away.”

G.Carlin

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
8 posted 2006-04-25 05:07 PM




…in tennis shoes of thought…in tennis shoes of thought… dang Stranger! You do this thing so well!


Martie
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9 posted 2006-05-09 02:15 PM


DS

"you brought your mountains also
with the handle ends willing
to make the tides want your texture
and the coat room of your secrets"

I wonder if there are still coat rooms, ghost caught on hooks of time?

RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08
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uk
10 posted 2006-05-09 02:36 PM


Strange ideas that make you think oddly but thats how poetry usually turns out
passing shadows
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displaced
11 posted 2006-05-09 03:37 PM


have missed reading you
devina
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Cali
12 posted 2006-05-09 04:43 PM


Damn hunny... it is sooo good to read you/this again...

missed your way more than I 'member...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



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