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Crawling Towards Nothing
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Crawling Towards Nothing |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Trace with the finger of intent, edging a cliff of neuroses. I witnessed your mercurial dissent. I think of it occasionally. Derogatory adjectives roll from tongue so eloquently. Oh how the smile broadens to know from by lines lonely words you bestow. Acceptance will never be felt. The cards are as you dealt. Tap, tap, and swill Fingers so deftly looking for nightly thrill. Buzz soaking acceptance. Blessed are the demented, for this there is no repentance. Cycle through them with astute recall. What you look for can’t possibly fool them all. Nor does anything last forever. Fans grow tired and You cease to matter "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
Powerful ! My responses run from... Excellent ! to... nyuk nyuk nyuk |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Uriah. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Good for you, girl! Well done! - Owl |
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Les Gartner Junior Member
since 2006-04-10
Posts 37MD |
Susan, Great poem! I like the tongue-in-cheek effect and the humor and then, out of nowhere, that overpowering death blow of the last line. Just fantastic. Les |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
packin that punch again, you have that way Susan....I appreciate that about you.....   And so it those we live with |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Brava on that finishing 'coup de grace' stroke! I love it when your strong side sings!  Warm hug and a pat on the back, Linda  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You go girl! Gets easier every time doesn't it? Good job Susan. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Great write - terrific ending! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
SOCK IT TO HIM!! YOU SURELY DID  |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Way to go Susan ! ...................paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 all of you are way too kind. Thank you! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
love the title |
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shmity72 Junior Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 26wa usa |
ty for sharing parts of your self. that poem makes me a bit flustered. ty again, I like it much. slaves 'oft love their masters. |
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