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Open Poetry #37

Part one: Now and Still

BlackEyedBueaty07
Junior Member

since 2006-04-05

Posts 27
rittman, ohio

0 posted 2006-04-15 03:24 PM

Now and Still
Part one...

I dont want to be here
I dont like my life
Als i want to do is die

I dont even know why
But i want it to end
Everything ive already dreamed of is already dead

I dont want to be in this situation
Now knowing what to do
Where to go, What to say

No
I dont want to be here
I want to be gone

This life is confusing
its like im already gone
Because no one notices me

My family dosent understand
Nethier do some of my friends...

-to be continued...-

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

1 posted 2006-04-20 11:49 PM

*bump*

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2006-04-21 10:40 AM

I dont want to be in this situation
Now knowing what to do
Where to go, What to say

I think many of us can identify with these feelings. *S*

Ordinarily... I'd consider offering a gentle suggestion that the poem be posted in its entirety instead of using the "to be continued"... in part because I like the whole story at once. *S* But it works here... for when you're in these depths, they seem to continue ad infinitum

You express your emotions well and I'll look forward to reading more of your work... Meanwhile... I hope things improve for you! *S*

Les Gartner
Junior Member

since 2006-04-10

Posts 37
MD

3 posted 2006-04-21 11:14 AM

I think that Suthern is right. You're expressing yourself very beautifully and things will improve for you. Use your poetic talent to lessen the burden.

Les

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2006-04-22 01:04 AM

...and I agree with Suthern and Les. Keep writing till you write your way out of this place.

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