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Subtle Poison
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Subtle Poison |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Subtle Poison I rolled it in my hands when young Without the feeling being stung But youth is when we test our strength And we go to almost any length Quick silver stays within the lane A subtle poison drives you insane Delivering light a bright summers view Infecting the form of mornings dew It flows like the tide of a river Affecting the mind and the liver Slowly building a delta of mud Where nothing can grow or come to bud It is a poison of subtle drain Once ingested there’s no refrain It works its way into your mind Until your eyes and thoughts are blind So do not touch quick silvers bright No matter how bright the light |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sy...this brought back a very, very old memory... but as always, you leave a lesson behind. Good Sunday Morning, m'friend.    |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Ah but the quick silver is so tempting Sy. Well done. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Sir Sonneteer! "So do not touch quick silvers bright No matter how bright the light" ~ I consider myself duly warned! All that glitters is not gold! ~ But of course, you are the exception to that rule!  Love you, T-Man! EA |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wise words Seymour. Too many good people have fallen prey to this temptation. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Very good, See More "It is a poison of subtle drain Once ingested there’s no refrain It works its way into your mind Until your eyes and thoughts are blind" This poem could stand as metaphor for many different things...first love, first drink, first illicit drug....etc... But I'll enjoy it at its face value... _______ ____ice ><> |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
As always, you wrote this beautifully. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
very creative warning... chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Good Lord! Yes, I remember playing with Mercury as a kid Someone always seemed to have a small vial of it...I recall being awed by the way it married itself to a quarter (Silver, in those days) Now, I feel lucky to recall anything at all |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Some lessons we learn too late, but maybe that's just our own perception. A lesson learned is a lesson learned, yes? Beautifully written, Sy.  jo |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dear Sy interesting write, enjoyed the message... I'm guessing that a quick silver is some sort of alcoholic beverage  ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine Ii was sure you had touched quick silver at some time.  scorpio Yes it is.  Earth Angel Dangerous talk. LOL Chris That is true. ice Although the incident is true you saw the metaphor. SmartChick Thank you my dear. SmartChick Glad you enjoyed the read. wranx I remember the weird feeling of the metal rolling around in my hand to this day. Who knew the danger LOL. iliana Yes and thank you. tracie66 Mercury is a liquid silvr metal and poisonus To life. But in this poem it could be alcohol it was used as a metaphor. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Goodness, so much can be gleaned here for I saw a poisonous relationship in that silver: It flows like the tide of a river Affecting the mind and the liver Slowly building a delta of mud Where nothing can grow or come to bud |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing Stay in flight dear its no place to land. LOL |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
I read this as Pabst Blue Ribbon's silver can being lifted to drain a liver of its life...  I agree with ICE, it could be a metaphor for many things... great write! hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
dgvarner Thank you and it's nice to see you here. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Quick silver stays within the lane A subtle poison drives you insane Delivering light a bright summers view Infecting the form of mornings dew How did I miss this, and you? when did you sneak in? Sy, your a light that shines always, incredible write |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy...I remember as a young mother, shaking down the thermometor and shaking it right out of my hand....of course it broke into many little round pieces of mercury that had the kids facinated...luckily I knew it was dangerous. Can't remember how I cleaned it up...except that it was tricky. Enjoyed this as I enjoy all your poetry! PS How do you clean it up? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm with wranx... feeling lucky to recall at all... for mercury fascinated me and I'd sneak any opportunity to play with those wondrous shining globules... Fortunately, such opportunities were few, far between and very VERY brief... my mother had eyes in the back of her head... and both sides, too! LOL You wrote this beautifully, my friend... so many things are pretty to look at... and pure poison. Well done!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ Thank you sweety. Martie It seems everyone has had an encounter with quick silver. suthern Thank you, you got the whole message. |
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