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Open Poetry #37

A Bubble In The Fog

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2006-04-15 06:17 AM

The morning fog is not a cat
today,
in the predawn light
here
it sifts through my open windows
a hydra
wagging tongues,
seeking,
outside it thickens in soft waves
running from the sun
while the day struggles
with its pants undone,
the world is gone ten feet away.

©2006 by icebox

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

1 posted 2006-04-15 08:04 AM

you leave me without words a lot these days

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

2 posted 2006-04-15 08:49 AM

Dear Box of Ice, has anyone ever told you that you ARE a poet?!?

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

3 posted 2006-04-15 10:57 AM

Nice!!!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

4 posted 2006-04-15 08:15 PM

Excellent!!

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

5 posted 2006-04-15 11:40 PM

I loved the metaphors! Masterful work, appreciated.

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

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The Southwest

6 posted 2006-04-16 01:45 AM

I have to agree with the others. You leave me speechless and you are definitley a POET.

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

7 posted 2006-04-16 12:45 PM

Your poem is a paradox this morning....so much imagery and fog does take is all away! The first line is particulary intriguing, because I've never compared fog to a cat before. "Sleeps fat, and walks thin..." Thank you, Poet.

~ Karen ~

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