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Too Much Love for an Untrained Eye
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Too Much Love for an Untrained Eye |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
He sat tilted head his lids tucked softly lips ajar; His daughter sensed the moments calling A portrait without slandering flaw. “Little girl, little girl, time to draw… Believe you can…” “I think I can, I think I- Possibly I -” The adolescent studied his graying face. So easily to disgrace. “Where does the pencil go to tilt his pose with humor, Angle his English nose? Capture his contagious spark, encompass determinations glow?” “Little girl, why do you hesitate? So you’ve not drawn? Unknowingly, you might have a gift Just pretend, feign along!” She studied him relentlessly, Yet, could not place pencil to pad. Dandelion on couch so sad, You missed the window, missed. Too much love drawn by the untrained eye; Regrets of apprehension, failure to try. [This message has been edited by miscellanea (04-14-2006 10:01 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Misc~ This one drew it's own picture ... that moment lost ... 'Where does the pencil go to tilt his pose with humor' ... sort of like letting the words flit by without capturing them and stitching them to the page~ I like the depth of thought that went into this, capturing that moment of hesitation~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Vivid imagery captured the scene perfectly. The moment's hesitation, the pencil and pad, the artist and the subject. A most excellent write. Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Marge, Nancy, It gives me pleasure to feel your total understanding of this. The event happened over thirty years ago, but I remember the helpless feeling as if it were today. I liked your comparisons... Thanks for taking time to respond. cathy |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Amazing write, C. This one, I want to talk to you about, k? Love you....jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, I can understand your hesitancy in trying to capture on convass what was seemingly elusive an 'uncapturable'! You have however, now captured his essence with your words on the written page.  Hugs with love, Linda  |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
A relationship almost hidden yet waiting for understanding separated by a common language and a common mind Yes, liked it a lot Dave |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I agree with Linda, Miscee.....not only did you capture him, but the artist as well. Wonderful!! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Lovely< _JUJU -<>-~-<>-~-<>- |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
How overwhelming Presence can be, especially when love leaves you blind and mute. I can sympathize with this would-be artist who sees hues beyond normal description, as if the art ends up painting the artist. I'm thinking this poem paints you in a lovely light.  Klassy |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
How I identify with this one though even harder is the one who tries and is chided into never trying again - great poem - Paul |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Just wanted you to know how I appreciate your comments. They mean so much. thanks, miscellanea |
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