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Open Poetry #37

There are no heros

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2006-04-09 11:38 PM

There are no heros
where is this zion
I am not so strong
to find this alone
my hands are empty
no sword and no shield
I carry such burden
my weopon's my pain

-Juju

Roberta Little
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since 2001-12-18

Posts 42
beloit wi usa

1 posted 2006-04-10 03:25 PM

short and simple, yet it get a point across.

GOD's greatist gift is LOVE

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2006-04-10 09:33 PM

I know that too well

good one JuJu

Musicmaker1969

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since 2000-06-25

Posts 589
Peterborough, Ontario Canada

3 posted 2006-04-10 11:07 PM

I know your pain. YOu can find your sword which is the Bible and the shield is the Holy Spirit who will guide you to Zion. Well written and expressed. Short, sweet and to the point.

Sheri Adams

Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!!
Sheri Liegh Adams
sheriliegh@sympatico.ca

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

4 posted 2006-04-11 12:00 PM

Thank you for you comment, actually this is not a religous poem, but sorrowful ones and used the zion or promised land idea as where I want to be and how I feel like failing. Instead of right out blaiming others, it is implied. This is to show the dispret feelings I feal. thank you for replying I appreciate it alot.

Lots of lov'n

-juju

EyeLashes
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since 2006-04-11

Posts 3

5 posted 2006-04-11 12:23 PM

I loved this poem. Straight to the point, like your poem. I wish I had a critique for you, sorry.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2006-04-11 12:54 PM

Excellent work Juju. I enjoyed it.

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