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Still Life |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Still Life See this shape like vase of vernal verve Constructed like the slide from waist to hip Soft the eye lingers within the curve That glistening condensation’s not a trick The sweet pea’s pink head leans to curled tendril And with a soft ear of listening hears it sing Like dusk in summer slow it barely trembles Think fearless of time’s treachery she would fling She loves the vessel where the water lives A gift to urgency unseen it gives To beauty of a flower blooming real This sensual still life knows how water feels --- 4-27-02 |
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Androgynous Member
since 2006-04-08
Posts 71 |
"This sensual still life knows how water feels" A beautiful line this, as were the entire poem. And, if I may ask, where did you get your name, sounds scandinavian  Love "How happy is the blameless vestal's lot! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
beautiful Martie... and I love your work always, but when you rhyme you are downright intriguing. Your use of assonance as rhyme is the second stanza is just so right-- the "tendril" to "trembles" I learn something new from you with every read.  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
With your wonderful photo...the gift of the sweet pea will always live on.... a lovely life, still, and yet, ever changing....  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So lovely dear Martie! And a wonderful new pic! Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
PartyMarty... You are quite the painter... How ya be? |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh, so delicate. Enjoyed this spring eve. TD |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Androginous....My last name I got from my husband...it's Norwegian. My first name is really Martha, but Martie was the name I became when I was given choice. Thanks for reading....and Sissie, thanks for helping me with that photo. Serenity, don't give up on rhyme...you do it so perfectly...I learn from you! to all! I'm so glad it's finally spring!! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
She loves the vessel where the water lives A gift to urgency unseen it gives To beauty of a flower blooming real This sensual still life knows how water feels Sensual still life is right! Earlier, I love the way you compared the shape of the vase with the human body... very sensual indeed. misc'e |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you see the hidden intricacies of beauty that are often missed by many |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"See this shape like vase of vernal verve Constructed like the slide from waist to hip" Wonderful! When I was a potter, I used to focus on that shape for most vases and tall jars. I think it is a line that is wired into my brain. *smile* (nice pictureT) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"The sweet pea’s pink head leans to curled tendril And with a soft ear of listening hears it sing" Beautiful lines throughout Martie. I love these in particular. Nicely drawn. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Yep ! ... another Martiesque Moment~ Love the way you bring the blossoms to life~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, Martie - this is simply lovely! The normal everyday seen through your eyes comes wonderfully alive to the reader. Such a gift you have! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
outstanding  what a write! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Your gentle eyes simply see things that almost no one else can ever experience....unless they read your poetry. I've said it so often that it's almost trite, but it's true -- when I read your words, I want to be there....and in some ways, I am. And the picture....makes me happy just to see it, Martie-girl...that's a Sweet Pea, I think, and how appropriate! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie, you did it! You wrote an exceptionally lovely poem about our nicknames! I'm glad you beat me to it because this one is so lovely that mine would pale in comparison! Here are some sweetpeas that I picked just for you!  Loveya, Sweetpea! Linda  P.S. Your pic is ADORABLE |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Martie this is so beautiful, so gentle, so perfect. And I love the poem too! :-) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Martie, this is absolutely pure and beautiful!   ....jo |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
As if the poem calls, to speak Directly to me: Opening to read, I am not suprised... That I am handed once again, a key To open natures door and see The hidden things, that normal words Cannot reveal to me. A delightful read, my dear poet friend... ---------ice/ford ><> |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Martie~ such a beautiful stillness... you write with such love...always..... And so it those we live with |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Oh, Martie! this poem breathes a life all its own in the soft rhyme and imagery of the water and flowers. I adore sweet peas, their color,their fragrance, the tenacious tendrils curling green and tender. Your poem is art! I love your poetic style! ~ Klassy ~ |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Your gentle heart shows clearly in this flowing poem. Always a pleasure to read you. Hugs, Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
A master piece Martie! A Monet of words. Made me wish for lilacs and tulips. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
This is just great Martie - sort of got wonderfully lost in it - Paul |
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