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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2006-04-07 05:07 PM


A moment of image in the door

Scent to everymore

Legs as if tied to chairs in words absorbed

On sticks of legs as plaintains

words can not reach

In plastic

in mind in a sense of falling

As if

All your desires were tied

To the image

By the door

That was you

And a

Scent

That is still allure

Dave Page


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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2006-04-07 05:40 PM


That makes perfect "scents" to me!


Linda

JL
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2 posted 2006-04-07 06:20 PM


"All your desires were tied

To the image

By the door

That was you

And a

Scent

That is still allure"

Great line Dave.
I enjoy reading your postings.
Nice write!!

JL



iliana
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3 posted 2006-04-07 07:42 PM


A moment captured!  Bravo!
froggy
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4 posted 2006-04-12 07:37 AM


Wonderful and beautiful.

:-)

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man will not himself find peace."

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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time
5 posted 2006-04-12 04:35 PM


And old romantic

But not that old

I can just make the cup of tea

dave

HopeS
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6 posted 2006-04-13 11:56 AM


Wonderful image portrayed


Hope

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7 posted 2006-04-13 01:59 PM


Dave~
And if your 'tea leaves' gift you with such lovely thoughts ... have another cup !!

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time
8 posted 2006-04-13 02:17 PM


Thanks everyone

Problem is I wrote it as if I couldn't move and couldn't get to a to woman who excited me due to the plastic on the legs leaving me to just live/leave with that essence of scent.

It came out different from what i writing - too many restricted in what they can achieve and in my usual I drapped it in romance and feelings

The words are there, the measurement is there,

The scent is there

Dave

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