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ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2006-04-05 08:04 AM

She has just begun stirring,
And calls for my attention:

But her features are repellent-
Just on waking; An apt reply
Might come in time, perhaps after
She puts on colored makeup;
Her skin is drab, and wrinkled,
And she needs to tint the mousy-
Browns and threads of gray,
That streak her mussy hair.

To make herself more attractive:
She must lose old night clothes,
That she has worn far too long-
They have to go! she must change
Her dressing, to become engaging,
Perhaps to apple blossom pink,
Lilac-purple or forsythia yellow;
Colors I know she keeps wardrobed.

Just on waking, her description
Might be better set in prose,
At this hour she is not comely,
Just too plain to explain
In any sort of romantic poetry.

Ladies:
Please take note....
Before you smack me!
This is not about a woman.
It is a riddle of sorts.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-04-05 08:09 AM

Nah, I won't poke ya.

StevenS
Senior Member

since 2005-09-21

Posts 945
L. A. (Lower Alabama)

2 posted 2006-04-05 10:12 AM

A riddle? Whew! for a minute there I though you had been back dooring me Ice.:-)

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2006-04-05 10:31 AM

Hey Ford, Good Morning, great to see you!

Spring is like that sometime, especially early spring...this was beautifully painted...well done

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-04-05 03:31 PM

excellent!

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2006-04-05 04:45 PM

Good morning, Ford

Morning gathers in the curtain
to displays a crimson light
dazzled through the slant of shading
across a flash of keen insight.

I loved your take on her....made me grin!

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2006-04-05 05:32 PM

It's a wonderful riddle ice. Tree, spring or morning.. it's very clever. Made me wonder where the heck you were going for a minute.

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

7 posted 2006-04-06 08:04 AM

Flowers are always beautiful when first awaking.

See you Saturday :-)

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

BugBuggy
Member

since 2005-12-19

Posts 130
michigan

8 posted 2006-04-13 11:22 PM

that was great I really enjoyed it never got the riddle tell i scrolled on down the line but once i did I could see the spring time come awake....thank you for sharing with us

BugBuggy

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA