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Into the Dark |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643
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we talk of mornings milking dandelions of their scent catching soft touches of sun laughing at what has yet to come barely getting to know who we are Painfully we part drift ourselves to work gather our duties folding them in place rushing to see the days end We never spoke of such a thing but our hearts new truths that mouths could not utter and brains could not justify stealing moments whispers hushes secrets to expose lies Laying nightly sharing the moon we gasp at the thoughts of anger forgetting that the world outside still needs us lifting our brows in obnoxious greed good thing the sheets are made of satin perched, again I talk you listen on rocks beaten by waves the sea speaks to us giving us knowledge we couldn't possibly understand clouds dark, roll in letting the light peak at our souls with evening air tapping on my shoulder restless you walk I follow into the dark |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
These images are describe the power of loving to me. Well done. TD |
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greysolace Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71 |
made me think of how our innocence is stolen when as we get older and how people tend to forget the pleasures of life as they get older. (was i right??) i like it |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Grey you are a very close...Because this poem can be interpeted in so many ways I leave up to the reader to convey their own special meaning... However grey, you rae quite close to what I thought of when writing this. TD, thank you for your beautiful comment. I love the way you saw this poem. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
The morning of love and then the dark. Beautifully portrayed Page. |
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sweetberry Member
since 2006-03-29
Posts 125 |
I enjoyed your poem. In my relationship there are many times I feel what you are expressing: "mouths could not utter and brains could not justify.... to expose lies." My exact feelings at times!!! Thanx |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
You are welcome Sweet, and thanks again Lady!!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is an outstanding write that really hit home for me, but I prefer to keep the reason to myself right now  |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
And that is definitely your right Passing...I am happy you enjoyed it! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
spoke to me of an innocence untouched by the outside world because the ones involved took the time to make it so. Indeed, a very good read. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thanks again Susan. I am happy it moved you so. |
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