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Open Poetry #37

Aboulia

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2006-01-16 07:17 PM

Ah Thomas . . .
When nothing has meaning . . .
It’s easy to see
The world at large
As very small . . .

With no gods in the clouds
The mountains or stars not metaphors
You struggle for order
And find only void
For a cause

Yet for all your despair
In iambic pentameter
Imbued with ennui and pedant misery
You still cling to the rail on this balcony
And look both ways on a road . . .

Where any rabbit or squirrel
Seems to know far better than you
What a miracle it is
That we are

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

1 posted 2006-01-16 08:09 PM

Nice Job!!

mighty mouth
Junior Member

since 2006-01-05

Posts 24
Missouri, USA

2 posted 2006-01-16 08:17 PM

i like the last stanza especially.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2006-01-18 10:04 PM

You are an excellent poet. I always enjoy your work.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2006-01-20 02:27 PM

You seem to get better by the hour! I had to look up Aboulia in the dictionary (loss of will power, for those who also don't know). Ah, what comfort you bring to all Doubting Thomases.

I love the whole poem, but that last stanza is the most Wow!

- Owl

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2006-01-20 03:03 PM

Yes I agree with The Lady... you are an excellent poet.

Enjoyed muchly

library

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how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more
~Neruda~

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

6 posted 2007-04-23 12:58 PM

why we need to beat ourselves donw, down again?

enjoyed.

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