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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688

0 posted 2006-01-16 07:17 PM

Ah Thomas . . .
When nothing has meaning . . .
It’s easy to see
The world at large
As very small . . .

With no gods in the clouds
The mountains or stars not metaphors
You struggle for order
And find only void
For a cause

Yet for all your despair
In iambic pentameter
Imbued with ennui and pedant misery
You still cling to the rail on this balcony
And look both ways on a road . . .

Where any rabbit or squirrel
Seems to know far better than you
What a miracle it is
That we are

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since 2005-11-12
Posts 643

1 posted 2006-01-16 08:09 PM

Nice Job!!
mighty mouth
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since 2006-01-05
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Missouri, USA
2 posted 2006-01-16 08:17 PM

i like the last stanza especially.
The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
3 posted 2006-01-18 10:04 PM

You are an excellent poet. I always enjoy your work.

Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2006-01-20 02:27 PM

You seem to get better by the hour!  I had to look up Aboulia in the dictionary (loss of will power, for those who also don't know).  Ah, what comfort you bring to all Doubting Thomases.

I love the whole poem, but that last stanza is the most Wow!

- Owl

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

5 posted 2006-01-20 03:03 PM

Yes I agree with The Lady... you are an excellent poet.

Enjoyed muchly



how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more

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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
6 posted 2007-04-23 12:58 PM

why we need to beat ourselves donw, down again?


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